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Cboutin3 Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Sentence choice
Which sentence is a better choice?
1. When Merroc, the new Highmage following the death of Jorelia, was handing over the gate key to the Lord of Palanthas, Andras, who was magically controlled by Fistandantilus, appeared in one of the highest windows of the Tower and told the crowd that no one could enter the magical stronghold until the Master of Past and Present arrived.
2. When Merroc, the new Highmage following the death of Jorelia, was handing over the gate key to the Lord of Palanthas, Andras, who was magically controlled by Fistandantilus, appeared in one of the highest windows of the Tower. Andras told the crowd that no one could enter the magical stronghold until the Master of Past and Present arrived.
1. When Merroc, the new Highmage following the death of Jorelia, was handing over the gate key to the Lord of Palanthas, Andras, who was magically controlled by Fistandantilus, appeared in one of the highest windows of the Tower and told the crowd that no one could enter the magical stronghold until the Master of Past and Present arrived.
2. When Merroc, the new Highmage following the death of Jorelia, was handing over the gate key to the Lord of Palanthas, Andras, who was magically controlled by Fistandantilus, appeared in one of the highest windows of the Tower. Andras told the crowd that no one could enter the magical stronghold until the Master of Past and Present arrived.
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You know that I normally prefer dividing sentences, but in this case #1 does read better.
- You know that I normally prefer dividing sentences, but in this case #1 does read better.
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You know that I normally prefer dividing sentences, but in this case #1 does read better.
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