0
Jack.Dalton Posted 15 years ago
Grammar

Sentence check vol.3

Hi.

Please help me with these sentences:

  1. A physically attractive woman is she who has big eyes, a small nose, delicate cheekbones, a petite chin, smooth skin, long legs, a slim waist and large hips. (is it correct or should instead of “she” be “a woman”?)
  2. Even so, it is commonly believed that beauty can help a lot in both one's personal and professional life. (is “one’s” necessary here? )
  3. Not many years ago, beauty parlours were popular only among film stars and VIP's concerned about their body image. (is “body” necessary, I mean isn’t it “hidden” in a word “image”?)
  4. And women are not the only ones who worry about the way their bodies look: men are just as obsessed. (shouldn’t there be insted of “the way their bodies look” – “the look of their bodies”?)
  5. In Brazil and Venezuela, parents often treat their teenage daughters to the correction of lips which are too thin, protruding ears or snub noses. (do we say: “treat sb to the correction”?)
Thank you.
  

Top answer

All five are okay.

— Anonymous

  • All five are okay.
Free · every Monday

Get the Weekly English Kit 📬

New words, one handy idiom, and a 2-minute quiz — delivered to your inbox to keep your streak alive.

1 Answers

Related Questions