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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
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can someone help rephrase my sentence please? if it is okay, then comment if you will. i need some criticism =]
"Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it. "
"Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it. "
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Hi, " Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it. " You need to revise this sentence a lot. You might even break it into shorter sentences, with clear subjects.
- Hi, " Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it.
- " You need to revise this sentence a lot.
- You might even break it into shorter sentences, with clear subjects.
- Here are a few comments.
- Who do you mean by 'their'?
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Hi,
"Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it. "
You need to revise this sentence a lot. You might even break it into shorter sentences, with clear subjects. Here are a few comments.
Who do you mean by 'their'? You
"Art in the Renaissance was, in my opinion, finding their inner selves while taking in religious concepts and being the first era to actually get more profundity in to it. "
You need to revise this sentence a lot. You might even break it into shorter sentences, with clear subjects. Here are a few comments.
Who do you mean by 'their'? You
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