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Does this sentence make sense:"Jim was a young and single man, who despite being gallant, didn't rodomontade (or never rodomontade) too much in words, and was willing to show his bests in acts (actions)."Note(s): The word 'rodomontade' was taken from the dictionary, and this is for an essay.

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Christine ChristieDoes this sentence make sense:

I guess, but there are problems.

No commas are called for in the sentence. Any comma would be wrong.

It is hard to see why we care about his marital status, but maybe that ties in with something we can't see here.

The verb "rodomontade" is a rare word. It occurs less than once in 100 million printed words. I had to look it up to be sure it was a verb, and MW even claims it is not. The word is not good here. It connotes extravagance and bluster, and all you mean here is regular boasting. Don't crowbar in words you aren't familiar with. Even a native speaker usually reveals his ineptitude in the very act of trying to diplay his aptitude when he does that.

"Too much" is redundant with "rodomontade".

The only way to rodomontade is in words.

It's "best", not "bests", but even "best" is odd. Use a noun that means what you want to say that he tries to show, like "quality" or "courage", maybe.

"Actions" is better than "acts". We commonly use the fossil word "deeds" when we contrast talk with action, and to try to say it some other way is to reinvent the wheel, and the reader knows it unless you do it very well.

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