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Hi. I will appreciate if you could check the sentence and tell me if what I'm trying to describe is clear and if it's grammatically correct.
Sonia stood talking on the phone just outside the hotel's gift shop when two guys suddenly started fighting around the corner from her down the end of the hallway.
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Sonia stood talking on the phone just outside the hotel's gift shop when two guys suddenly started fighting around the corner from her down at the end of the hallway. It's not really clear. You need more description of the floor plan of the hotel.
- Sonia stood talking on the phone just outside the hotel's gift shop when two guys suddenly started fighting around the corner from her down at the end of the hallway.
- It's not really clear.
- You need more description of the floor plan of the hotel.
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Sonia stood talking on the phone just outside the hotel's gift shop when two guys suddenly started fighting around the corner from her down at the end of the hallway.
It's not really clear. You need more description of the floor plan of the hotel.
0"Stood" is a clinker. "Was standing" is better, but you can't have "standing talking", because it sounds weird. So the first part becomes "Sonia was standing just outside the hotel's gift shop talking on the phone". The rest is good grammar but confusing. What corner? How is there a hallway, and could Sonia tell it was two guys fighting just by whatever sound came around the corner after it ha
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