Seeking comments on a short email replying to users regarding insufficient cool air
I would like to seek someone’s comments on the grammar and sentence structure for the email below regarding insufficient air conditioning in a room.
A new computer equipment has been installed in the server room at the ABC building on the 20th floor as informed by Peter in 2021. The server room has equipped with an existing air conditioning system, including 3 nos. of individual air conditioners and a central air conditioning system. During the nighttime without running of central air conditioning system, users requested a solution to improve the indoor temperature from about 25 oC to lower.
In April 2021, the contractor arranged site inspections and measurements on the floor at the building. They identified it was insufficient space and air exchange of the existing plant room for the installation of a new unit or replacement of a large cooling capacity unit.
With the aim of improving the situation, please consider reducing the heat dissipation of the computer equipment or providing a new plant room with a good condition for the installation of a new unit.
Top answer
A (Equipment is noncount. " new computer equipment has been installed in the server room at the ABC building on the 20th floor as informed by Peter (Usually business emails do not refer to people by their first name. Also "as informed" is not good.
- A (Equipment is noncount.
- " new computer equipment has been installed in the server room at the ABC building on the 20th floor as informed by Peter (Usually business emails do not refer to people by their first name.
- Also "as informed" is not good.
- ) in 2021 .
- (Much time has passed in 2021 so far.
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A (Equipment is noncount. You cannot use "a" with "equipment." new computer equipment has been installed in the server room at the ABC building on the 20th floor as informed by Peter (Usually business emails do not refer to people by their first name. Also "as informed" is not good. Use the
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