Second try, Please help it is URGENT

Afer many drafts, my second posting for this letter of motivation. Quite different than the first one, could somebody correct this letter. I´m not confident it´s grammatically oke.

Dear, Sirs,

I would like to apply for the master´s programme Comparative Labour and Organisation Studies, please let me explain my motivation in a few words.

I am a student in communication science and I am also taking a minor in labour studies.

Last year I participated in a bachelor seminar at the ISHSS, and working together with international students turned out to be a great learning experience. I was very delighted to discover that the ISHSS offers different master’s programme’s. Since I was already taking an elective course in the field of labour and organisation studies at that time, the COLOS programme immediately draw my attention. For this master´s programme, sufficient knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies is required. Therefore I enrolled in the specialization programme labour studies at the Amsterdam Institute for Advanced Labour Studies in September last year. Besides learning more about the field of labour and organisation studies, this programme offered me the opportunity to find out whether I would like to continue my studies within this field. After attending the mini lectures and programme meetings at ISHSS this year and my learning experience within the labour studies programme, I was even more convinced that the answer tot this question is yes.

During my studies (or along with my studies) I have been working for a television production company on the department of communications. The company was faced with a fast changing market and in order to maintain their competitive advantages, they had to reorganize its organizational structure. This part In my working experience I found the most interesting. I was a member of a task force, which was responsible for presenting a proposal for a new organizational structure. Although I was responsible for a smaller part of the whole organizational change process, the professional consultants whom I was working with gave me an inside look in the complete process. Through this experience I realized I was eager to learn more on this topic. Organizational change involves much more then presenting a new structure and strategy on paper. It involves redesigning jobs, training of employees and sometimes the firing of employees. This also made me get interested in matters involving the labour market. I decided to complete my bachelor’s degree in communication science, taking as many courses possible in business and communication and switch to a different master’s programme that would fit my interest in labour and organisation better.

The COLOS programme offers an exciting interdisciplinary scenario, in which I will have the opportunity to expand my knowledge in the field of labour and organisation studies and to learn from recognized scientist from different disciplines. Studying with both national and international students adds a special element to the programme, which I highly appreciate. Studying at the ISHSS within the COLOS master’s programme would enable me to develop a strong background of knowledge and improve my English language skills. This would make it possible for me to pursue a career as an advisor for labour organisations.

Considering my qualifications and interests outlined above and in my CV, I very much hope that you will consider me for the COLOS master’s programme.

Sincerely,

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