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David Forman Posted 14 years ago
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Safari trip

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Safari trip could be your ultimate honeymoon destination if you are looking for fun and entertainment. As a couple, you should decide what makes you more engaged either it is going to national parks to see those wild creatures closely or sitting at the beach with an exotic meals?
  

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Hello, David—and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised text: Safari trip could be your ultimate honeymoon destination if you are looking for fun and entertainment.

  • Hello, David—and welcome to English Forums.
  • I have underlined some problem areas.
  • Please fix them and post your revised text: Safari trip could be your ultimate honeymoon destination if you are looking for fun and entertainment.
  • As a couple, you should decide what makes you more engaged either it is going to national parks to see those wild creatures closely or sitting at the beach with an exotic meals?
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Hello, David—and welcome to English Forums. I have underlined some problem areas. Please fix them and post your revised text:

Safari trip could be your ultimate honeymoon destination if you are looking for fun and entertainment. As a couple, you should decide what makes you more engaged either it is going to national parks to see those wild crea
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Perhaps, I shouldn't have written it in the rush. Here is the revision:
Safari could be your ultimate honeymoon destination if you are looking for fun and entertainment. And if you wish to make make fresh memories to preserve them in your diary so that you can share them with your friend
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An African safari could be the ultimate honeymoon trip. If you're looking for something really unusual, and fun and entertaining, and way off the beaten path, this could be it. You decide. Is looking out the window of a Land Rover at a man-eating lion, inches from your face, your kind of thing? Or do you like the standard honeymoon fare, sitting on the beach sipping exotic cocktails?

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