Road accidents are more frequent these days and claim many lives each year. As a result, some people suggest that drivers should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single driving test, to improve the situation. Do...

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It goes without saying that more and more accidental risks nowadays occur in human life and regularly organizing driver license tests are more effective than only a single one. From my point of view, this method absolutely contributes numerous advantages compared to little drawbacks by checking people’s ability.

To start with the demerits of repeat driving tests, more driving tests are willing to cause a loss of money, effort happens when they are quite busy in modern life. Moreover, they truly prepare for the following event by allocating money then affording to pass this exam and this is irrational unless some participants are free to do other tasks. Researchers show evidence that a vast of blue workers in China are struggling to set a schedule for other outside activities besides intensive works so that driving exams repeating annually is not appropriate for them to enroll without any aid.

To outline the advantages, their benefits have a vital role in reducing traffic accidents and enhance awareness of people about traffic safety. In addition, authorities would offer several requirements for citizens meeting in order to check citizens’ abilities including driving skills, the rules of conduct and this way helps participants have responsibility for their actions and do not make any bad consequences for other members. for example, after having established traffic rights in HCMC, people firstly feel depressed because of so many ties like taking helmet before joining traffic way, a maximum of the movement are just two, but luckily local residents soon adjust their behavior then attitude toward a positive outlook, and thereafter they attempt to adapt the new laws. This circumstance does not only create traffic awareness but it also diminishes traffic damage for all applicants.

In short, road accidents happen too much in traffic systems in modern life and cause harmful aspects. Moreover, people would reconstruct the safety of traffic lines thanks to taking yearly driving tests and these useful activities bring enormous benefits rather than the loss of money or any effort.

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You wrote over 330 words. The minimum is 250. You will not lose points for writing more; however, longer essays generally do not get high band scores. And there are many reasons for this.

First, the longer the essay, the more chances you have to make errors, and you will lose points for each of those errors.

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Third, you will likely stray off-topic, and examiners will deduct points if you are not focused on the topic. Do not write about things that are not specifically given in the task. You will also be tempted to use weak or unsound arguments or even lose your direction and contradict yourself. Develop just two or three argument points with examples and personal experiences. It is much better to have two well-developed and fleshed-out argument points than to have four which are just individual separate statements.

Fourth, you will spend a lot of time writing, and not have sufficient time left over to proofread your essay. You will miss the silly mistakes, which everyone makes, and that lowers your score.

Fifth, you will not have enough time for Task 1, and get a lower score there. You should allow 40 minutes for task and 20 minutes for Task 1. The word counts are designed so that you have ample time for brainstorming and then writing the two parts.

Aim to write270-290 words for Task 2. Practice writing a lot of essays so you get a feeling for the length.

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You did not post the complete instructions, so I will assume this is the task:

Road accidents are more frequent these days and claim many lives each year. As a result, some people suggest that drivers should take regular driving tests throughout their lives, rather than one single driving test, to improve the situation. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of repeat driving tests?

Most of your writing is incomprehensible due to unnatural expressions, overly long sentences, wrong verb and noun forms, and poor word choices. These tasks are very very challenging. You need to practice a lot, paying attention to these points:

Write short, simple sentences that have good transitions.
Use vocabulary words that you understand completely.
Be careful of plural / singular forms and subject/verb matching.

It goes without saying that more and more accidental risks nowadays occur in human life (That makes no sense. You need to write clearly. "Accidental risk" is rather meaningless. ) and regularly organizing (wrong word) driver license tests are (wrong verb form) more effective than only a single one. From my point of view, this method absolutely contributes numerous advantages compared to ~~little~~ the few drawbacks ~~by checking people’s ability.~~

To start with the demerits (wrong word. "Demerit" means a mark against a person. It is very very rarely used to mean the opposite of "advantage" and only in limited contexts.) of repeat driving tests, more driving tests are willing (wrong usage. Driving tests do not have willingness, people do.) to cause a loss of money, effort happens when they (The tests? Are the tests busy?) are quite busy in modern life. Moreover, they (Do the tests prepare for something?) truly prepare for the following event by allocating money then affording to pass this exam and this is irrational unless some participants are free to do other tasks. (This paragraph makes no sense at all. You need to write clearly and express your ideas correctly.) Researchers show evidence that a vast (Vast is an adjective. You cannot use it as a noun.) of blue workers (That means they are very cold. It does not make sense.) in China are struggling to set a schedule for other outside activities besides intensive works (wrong form) so that driving exams repeating (wrong form) annually is not appropriate for them to enroll without any aid. (I do not know what you mean.)

To outline the advantages, their benefits have a vital role in reducing traffic accidents and remind ~~enhance awareness of~~ (The verb "enhance" is very frequently misused. It is not a general synonym for "improve") people about traffic safety. In addition, authorities would offer several requirements for citizens meeting in order to check citizens’ abilities including driving skills, the rules of conduct and this way helps participants have responsibility for their actions and do not make any bad consequences for other members. (This sentence is too long and verbose. ) for (wrong punctuation) example, after having established traffic rights in HCMC, people ~~firstly~~ feel depressed because of so many ties (wrong word ) like taking helmet (wrong expression) before joining traffic ~~way~~, a maximum of the movement are just two, but luckily local residents soon adjust their behavior then attitude toward a positive outlook, and thereafter they attempt to adapt the new laws. (This sentence is too long and verbose. It is very difficult to understand.) This circumstance does not only create traffic awareness but it also diminishes traffic damage (wrong expression) for all applicants.

In short, road accidents happen too much in traffic systems in modern life and cause harmful aspects. Moreover, people would reconstruct the safety of traffic lines thanks to taking yearly driving tests and these useful activities bring enormous benefits rather than the loss of money or any effort.

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