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Nitharsan Posted 21 years ago
Grammar
Rewritting these forms of sentences
Can someone tell me a good way of writting these sentences below, if possible.
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In this experiment I will determine, which battery is the best deal in terms of price and the length of use. I will also determine if the cost of money has anything to do with how long it can last.
TV advertisements usually promote certain brand batteries last longer. I am going to examine for myself if this statement is true. And I also need to know if there is a real difference between battery lives of different brands.
"I became interested in this topic because of a trip I once took with my sixth grade class. I went to camp for one week & I wanted to buy a flashlight so I can take it with me when I go out
at night for outdoor activities. I didn’t know which one can output the most power (length in use), so I thought this would be a good time to experiment my inquiry in this Science fair project.
In the near future this experiment will help me
choose a good brand that produces batteries and
with a good deal in terms of price and length of use.
This will also help other people make a good discussion on what brand battery they should buy in the future.
During this experiment I will learn about electricity and technical differences among different batteries.
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In this experiment I will determine, which battery is the best deal in terms of price and the length of use. I will also determine if the cost of money has anything to do with how long it can last.
TV advertisements usually promote certain brand batteries last longer. I am going to examine for myself if this statement is true. And I also need to know if there is a real difference between battery lives of different brands.
"I became interested in this topic because of a trip I once took with my sixth grade class. I went to camp for one week & I wanted to buy a flashlight so I can take it with me when I go out
at night for outdoor activities. I didn’t know which one can output the most power (length in use), so I thought this would be a good time to experiment my inquiry in this Science fair project.
In the near future this experiment will help me
choose a good brand that produces batteries and
with a good deal in terms of price and length of use.
This will also help other people make a good discussion on what brand battery they should buy in the future.
During this experiment I will learn about electricity and technical differences among different batteries.
Top answer
Get rid of first comma. Get rid of 'the cost'. Promote>claim.
- Get rid of first comma.
- Get rid of 'the cost'.
- Promote>claim.
- Get rid of next 'and'.
- Battery>the useful.
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Get rid of first comma. Get rid of 'the cost'. Promote>claim. Get rid of next 'and'.
Battery>the useful. Can>could. Go>went. 'one can output the most power' > 'which battery would last longer in the flashlight'.
Change to 'so I thought this science fair project would be a good opportunity to test this'.
Get rid of 'near'. 'that produces' > of . Get rid of next 'an
Battery>the useful. Can>could. Go>went. 'one can output the most power' > 'which battery would last longer in the flashlight'.
Change to 'so I thought this science fair project would be a good opportunity to test this'.
Get rid of 'near'. 'that produces' > of . Get rid of next 'an
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