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Legend7 Posted 15 years ago
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Rewriting paragraph in good english

Hello experts out there,

i am preparing my Resume and english is not my easybit, Here are the two paragraphs i have written and i know its not good and it doesn't clearly expresses what i meant to say, can any body help me with better words or formatting keeping the same meaning.

Objective : Interested joining a creative and agile software development team where i can give my best to the organization and develop my self as a valuable professional.


JOB DESCRIPTION:
Core developer of an open-source Business Intelligence(BI) application ABC (http://abc.org).  
Implemented some of the significant new features and made some notable changes like making application
support new features of Microsoft SSAS 2005. Used ICEfaces to make Ajaxified user interface and
was responsible for complete re-design of improved dashboard and reporting part of the application.
 
Thanks

  

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Here are my wording and format suggestions. Objective: Become a member of a creative and agile software development team that offers both professional growth and the opportunity to make a solid contribution to the organization. org) Implimented several significant new features, including changes which allowed the application to support the updated features of Microsoft SSAS 2005.

— Doctor D

  • Here are my wording and format suggestions.
  • Objective: Become a member of a creative and agile software development team that offers both professional growth and the opportunity to make a solid contribution to the organization.
  • org) Implimented several significant new features, including changes which allowed the application to support the updated features of Microsoft SSAS 2005.
  • Adapted ICEfaces to provide an Ajaxified user interface and was also responsible for the complete re-design of the application's new dashboard and reporting functions.
  • (I hope I used your technical terms correctly.
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Here are my wording and format suggestions.

Objective:

Become a member of a creative and agile software development team that offers both professional growth and the opportunity to make a solid contribution to the organization.

Recent Work:

Core developer of the open-source business intelligence applicati
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Thanks Doctor D,

that looks a lot better now,

i realy appreceate your help
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