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MyShirley Posted 20 years ago
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Getting hold of a degree is vital, and therefore students spend a lot of time on their academics, since their academic results are the golden ticket for them to make their goals happen.

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One variation: Students recognize that obtaining a college degree is vital to achieving their long-term goals, and therefore they devote much time to their academic pursuits. Or Students devote much time to their academic pursuits because they recognize that obtaining a college degree is the "golden ticket" to achieving their long-term goals.

  • One variation: Students recognize that obtaining a college degree is vital to achieving their long-term goals, and therefore they devote much time to their academic pursuits.
  • Or Students devote much time to their academic pursuits because they recognize that obtaining a college degree is the "golden ticket" to achieving their long-term goals.
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One variation:

Students recognize that obtaining a college degree is vital to achieving their long-term goals, and therefore they devote much time to their academic pursuits.

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Students devote much time to their academic pursuits because they recognize that obtaining a college degree is the "golden ticket" to achieving their long-term goals.

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