Review ielts writing task 1

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The map illustrates the figure of an island before and after the erection of several facilities served for visitors.

Overall, the island with approximately 250 meters length has experienced a significant change in the number of facilities and one of the most outstanding features in this development is the crowd density of accommodation.

After the construction, the island embraces a large number of new buildings. There are 2 areas of accommodation, each located at the West and the East of the island, also, the footpath is made for moving among them. Between those two are one restaurant and one reception, both lies in the center and connected by vehicle track.

Of the remaining, the vehicle track in front of the reception also leads to the pier, where tourists can marvel at the view with huge boats. Furthermore, at the Western of the island is the beach, connected with the accommodation units nearby by a footpath, is exploited for swimming activity.

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The map (Inaccurate. There is more than one map.) illustrates the figure (wrong usage. It is not about the general shape of the island that might have been changed by a storm.) of an island before and after the erection of several facilities served (wrong usage. Incorrect verb form) for visitors.

Overall, the island with approximately 250 meters length (awkward, unnatural) has experienced (wrong usage. People have experiences. Islands do not have the ability to have experiences.) a significant change in the number of facilities and one of the most outstanding features in this development is the crowd density of accommodation. (wrong usage. This is quite poor English. Crowd density is a calculation of the number of people per unit area. e.g. 5 people per square meter. Look here: https://www.gkstill.com/Support/crowd-density/CrowdDensity-1.html

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After the construction, the island embraces (wrong word. ) a large number of new buildings. There are 2 (Use digits only for data values.) two areas of accommodation, each located at the West (west is not a proper noun) and the East of the island, (wrong usage. You cannot end a sentence with a comma.) also, the footpath is made for walking between ~~moving among~~ them. Between those two are one restaurant and one reception, both lies (wrong verb form. ) in the center and connected (wrong verb form. ) by a vehicle track.

Of the remaining, (wrong usage. Remaining what?) the vehicle track in front of the reception also leads to the pier, ~~where tourists can marvel at the view with huge boats~~. (There are no people shown on the maps. Write only about what is on the maps. Do not invent ideas. Do not draw conclusions or make things up.) Furthermore, at the Western of the island is the beach, connected with the accommodation units (wrong usage. That is not a valid English phrase.) nearby by a footpath, is exploited (wrong usage. ) for swimming activity. (wrong usage.

Many students think that if they use high-level vocabulary, they will get a higher band score. This is a false impression. One of the four scoring criteria for Task 2 is "Lexical Resource." A student with a high level of lexical resource not only knows many words, but they know how to use them. Here are the descriptors:

Band score 7:

- uses a sufficient range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
- uses less common lexical items with some awareness of style and collocation
- may produce occasional errors in word choice, spelling and/or word formation

Band score 6:

- uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task
- attempts to use less common vocabulary but with some inaccuracy
- makes some errors in spelling and/or word formation, but they do not impede communication

The issue with your essay is that you make too many errors in word choice and usage. It is not enough to know a word from the dictionary; you have to use it correctly in a sentence. So it is much better to use vocabulary you know well than to make a lot of errors with words you are uncertain about.

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