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Identify the error(s) in each sentence.Less than 25% of the questionnaires mailed on June 21st have been returned. Less than 25 percent of the questionnaires mailed on June 21 have been returned.George was once in charge of security at the capital building, he is not impressed with our firms security system.George was once in charge of security at the capital building; he is not impressed with our firms’ security system.Lin Daniel, President of Haneman Industries has written an article that will appear in “Newsweek”.Lin Daniel, president of Haneman Industries, has written an article that will appear in Newsweek.Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible too receive that scholarship.Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible to receive the scholarship.Although the committee agreed with the plant managers’ conclusions; several members raised serious questions about the survey instrument.Although the committee agreed with the plant manager’s conclusions, several members raised serious questions about the survey instrument.John has submitted more suggestions than anyone in his department but he has yet to receive an award.John has submitted more suggestions than anyone in his department, but he has yet to receive an award.The procedure has been highly successful; however, is not popular in the advertising department.The procedure has been highly successful; however, it is not popular in the Advertising department.The man, who came late to the meeting, is the new Sales Manager for the southwest region.The man, who came late to the meeting, is the new Sales manager for the Southwest region.The 3 applicants were waiting to interview for the same job, therefore they had little to say to each other.The three applicants were waiting to interview for the same job; therefore, they had little to say to each other.Only one of my recommendations were considered, this was very disappointing to the supervisor and I.Only one of my recommendations was considered; this was very disappointing to the supervisor and me.

Feebs11 · Accepted Answer

1 The subject here is the percentage returned, not the questionnaires = singular verb required

2: Is there more than one firm involved? Or is only one involved = firms' OR firm's

3 you have identified the error correctly, and introduced a new one - president is here a title, so should be capitalized

4 OK
5 OK
6 OK
7 OK

8 I would question the commas in this one, and leave the capital letters alone

9 OK
10 OK

Clive · Answer

Hi,

Less than 25% of the questionnaires mailed on June 21st have been returned.
Less than 25 percent of the questionnaires mailed on June 21 have been returned.
Some people would say Fewer than 25 percent of the questionnaires mailed on June 21st. have been returned.
George was once in charge of security at the capital building, he is not impressed with our firms security system.
George was once in charge of security at the capital building; he is not impressed with our firms’ security system.

George was once in charge of security at the capital (possibly Capitol) building; he is not impressed with our firm's security system.

Lin Daniel, President of Haneman Industries has written an article that will appear in “Newsweek”.
Lin Daniel, president of Haneman Industries, has written an article that will appear in Newsweek.

Quotes are not wrong.

Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible too receive that scholarship.
Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible to receive the scholarship.

Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible to receive that scholarship?

Although the committee agreed with the plant managers’ conclusions; several members raised serious questions about the survey instrument.
Although the committee agreed with the plant manager’s conclusions, several members raised serious questions about the survey instrument.

Although the committee agreed with the plant manager’s (could be one or more managers, but probably one) conclusions, several members raised serious questions about the survey instrument.

John has submitted more suggestions than anyone in his department but he has yet to receive an award.
John has submitted more suggestions than anyone in his department, but he has yet to receive an award. OK
The procedure has been highly successful; however, is not popular in the advertising department.
The procedure has been highly successful; however, it is not popular in the Advertising department. A capital A is not strictly necessary.
The man, who came late to the meeting, is the new Sales Manager for the southwest region.
The man, who came late to the meeting, is the new Sales manager for the Southwest region.

The 3 applicants were waiting to interview for the same job, therefore they had little to say to each other.
The three applicants were waiting to interview for the same job; therefore, they had little to say to each other.

three

Only one of my recommendations were considered, this was very disappointing to the supervisor and I.
Only one of my recommendations was considered; this was very disappointing to the supervisor and me. <<<

Tidus · Answer

4. Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible too receive that scholarship.
Will you please find out whether first and second year students are eligible to receive the scholarship.

There are different types of scholarship available, therefore 'that', 'the' or 'a' scholarship are all acceptable. The sentence is clearly an enquiry as to whether first and second year students are eligble to receive a specific scholarship, so 'that' scholarship is correct. Therefore, the only error is the "too" which you correctly identified.

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