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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
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Resume objective
does this sound ok?
Career Objective: Position where combinative background in Children’s Ministry, Pre-School Education, and medical sciences which allows interaction with children in a professional arena.
Career Objective: Position where combinative background in Children’s Ministry, Pre-School Education, and medical sciences which allows interaction with children in a professional arena.
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Hi Anon: I had to read it more than once (actually several times) to parse the phrases and understand what you are trying to say. In my opinion, it would be better to simplify the statement, and to make a complete sentence rather than a fragment. It also left me with a question: what kind of interaction with children do you desire?
- Hi Anon: I had to read it more than once (actually several times) to parse the phrases and understand what you are trying to say.
- In my opinion, it would be better to simplify the statement, and to make a complete sentence rather than a fragment.
- It also left me with a question: what kind of interaction with children do you desire?
- All the best!
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Hi Anon:
I had to read it more than once (actually several times) to parse the phrases and understand what you are trying to say. In my opinion, it would be better to simplify the statement, and to make a complete sentence rather than a fragment. It also left me with a question: what kind of interaction with children do you desire?
All the best!
I had to read it more than once (actually several times) to parse the phrases and understand what you are trying to say. In my opinion, it would be better to simplify the statement, and to make a complete sentence rather than a fragment. It also left me with a question: what kind of interaction with children do you desire?
All the best!
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