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CCgeorge Posted 20 years ago
Letter Writing

Resume Letter Cover

would you please comment.





I am writing to response to your advertisement in JobsDB.com inviting applications for Safety Officer in your company.



I have 8 years post qualification experience in Safety Officer. I have Higher Certificate in Building Studies. I have a HKSAR contract experience. I familiar with computer skill: Microsoft Office, PowerPoint, Excel, Chinese and English word processing.



I am immediate available for the post.



Enclosed please find a resume with details of my personal particulars. I should be very grateful if you grant me an interview so that I can explain my qualifications more fully.



Thank you for your time and consideration.



Yours sincerely





XXXX
  

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Hi, Welcome to the Forum. Is this an email? If it's not, you need to put address/date/greeting at the top.

  • Hi, Welcome to the Forum.
  • Is this an email?
  • If it's not, you need to put address/date/greeting at the top.
  • You have written quite a good letter.
  • I've made some changes.
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Hi,

Welcome to the Forum.

Is this an email? If it's not, you need to put address/date/greeting at the top.

You have written quite a good letter. I've made some changes.

Best wishes, Clive

I am writing in response to your advertisement in JobsDB.com inviting applications for the position of Safety Officer in your company.
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Hi, Clive

Thank you your comment.

Would you please comment my resume content, too.

George

GEORGE

email address

Address: Phone:

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Hi,

I'd be happy to. But first, can you please reformat it aand repst it so that it fits more on the 'left side'? I can't see it all in the 'window' of my screen.

Thanks, Clive
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Dear Clive,

I set the format for your easy reading as follow:

EDUCATION

2005 of Technology Bachelor of Science (Safety and Health)

1998 Hong Kong Institute of Vocational Higher Certificate in Building Studies Education (IVE)

1987 Construction Industry Training Construction Safety Officer Certificate Authority (CITA)
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Hi,

The format still does not seem quite right, but I'll try to comment. I'm commenting based on the format that people use here where I live.

Put your name /address / phone / email at the top, as a heading.

Then put these sections, in this order:
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Hi!

Can you please help me if this is correct.

I am writing to you because I was wondering if you had any jobs available in your Embassy.

Thankyou
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I like that your cover letter is brief, up to the point and concise. No generalizations, needles facts, unclear language, and so on. I believe that a cover letter in addition to such a powerful resume makes you a perspective and quite a competitive candidate. I found an excellent safety m

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