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Fizzi Posted 18 years ago
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Can somebody please comments my English?
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Fizzi
1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries. (Product A , B and C were available in all surveyed countries)
2- However, as it is not required in the UK, information on Y was rarely mentioned in the UK websites.
3- Besides journal articles, about one-fifth of X in the UK used Z.
4- Xs were not assessed considering the realities of time pressures of busy general practice.
Regards,
Fizzi
1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries. (Product A , B and C were available in all surveyed countries)
2- However, as it is not required in the UK, information on Y was rarely mentioned in the UK websites.
3- Besides journal articles, about one-fifth of X in the UK used Z.
4- Xs were not assessed considering the realities of time pressures of busy general practice.
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Hi Fizzi, Here are some suggestions to make things clearer and more precise. 1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries surveyed. or in every country surveyed 2- However, information on Y was rarely mentioned on the UK websites, as this/such information is not required there.
- Hi Fizzi, Here are some suggestions to make things clearer and more precise.
- 1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries surveyed.
- or in every country surveyed 2- However, information on Y was rarely mentioned on the UK websites, as this/such information is not required there.
- Makes it clearer that 'it' refers to information and not to Y 3- About one-fifth of X in the UK used Z as well as journal articles.
- Is this what you mean?
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Hi Fizzi,
Here are some suggestions to make things clearer and more precise.
1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries surveyed. or in every country surveyed
2- However, information on Y was rarely mentioned on the UK websites, as this/such information is not required there. Makes it clearer that 'it' refers to information and not to Y
Here are some suggestions to make things clearer and more precise.
1- We found three products were promoted in all the countries surveyed. or in every country surveyed
2- However, information on Y was rarely mentioned on the UK websites, as this/such information is not required there. Makes it clearer that 'it' refers to information and not to Y
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Hi Clive,
Thanks for your comments. I have tried to rewrite the sentences.
3- About one-fifth of X in the UK used Z as well as journal articles. Is this what you mean?
- In addition to journal articles, about one-fifth of X in the UK used infroamtion available on the internet.
4- Xs were not assessed because of the time pressures of busy general practice.
Thanks for your comments. I have tried to rewrite the sentences.
3- About one-fifth of X in the UK used Z as well as journal articles. Is this what you mean?
- In addition to journal articles, about one-fifth of X in the UK used infroamtion available on the internet.
4- Xs were not assessed because of the time pressures of busy general practice.
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Hi,
I have tried to rewrite the sentences.
3- About one-fifth of X in the UK used Z as well as journal articles. Is this what you mean?
- In addition to journal articles, about one-fifth of Xs in the UK used information available on the internet. OK
4- Xs were not assessed because of the time pressures of busy general practice.
- Assessment Xs were
I have tried to rewrite the sentences.
3- About one-fifth of X in the UK used Z as well as journal articles. Is this what you mean?
- In addition to journal articles, about one-fifth of Xs in the UK used information available on the internet. OK
4- Xs were not assessed because of the time pressures of busy general practice.
- Assessment Xs were
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Hi Clive,
In the survey, I had measured a few indicators. However, I did not measured one indicator (X) as I assumed it was rarely used by GPs because they always busy.In this case, I think it was not appropriate for me to say they were busy as that was only my assumption.
Regards,
Fizzi
In the survey, I had measured a few indicators. However, I did not measured one indicator (X) as I assumed it was rarely used by GPs because they always busy.In this case, I think it was not appropriate for me to say they were busy as that was only my assumption.
Regards,
Fizzi
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