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0 Speaking about the role of human rights charters and legislation as the framework for democracy, for many people 01 b 00 who 02 b 00 have strong religious convictions, human rights charters and legislation seem to be usurping the role of religious doctrines and traditions, in terms of acting as the framework for the state in a democracy. 02 br
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00 Please check insertion of 01 b 00 who 02 b 00 in this sentence. Could this sentence rephrased for better clarity. 0-
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00 Please check insertion of 01 b 00 who 02 b 00 in this sentence. Could this sentence rephrased for better clarity. 0-
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0 The "who" definitely improves the sentence. It doesn't make sense without it. It probably would go better as two or three sentences, if that's allowed in your exercise.
- 0 The "who" definitely improves the sentence.
- It doesn't make sense without it.
- It probably would go better as two or three sentences, if that's allowed in your exercise.
- Perhaps the introductory participial phrase, up to the first comma, could be elimilated without losing anything from the sentence.
- 02 br 02 br 00 I think you need to clear up that the new democracies are the accused usurpers, as they attempt to change the framework for the state.
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0 The "who" definitely improves the sentence. It doesn't make sense without it. It probably would go better as two or three sentences, if that's allowed in your exercise. Perhaps the introductory participial phrase, up to the first comma, could be elimilated without losing anything from the sentence. Everything it says is repeated later. 02 br
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00 I think you need to clear
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00 I think you need to clear
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