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Jslee2 Posted 16 years ago
Letter Writing
Rental discount
hi... recently i try to convey my boss message to a letter to 1 of our tenants , i did it but my boss not satisfied, may i seek your advice ? ( below show )
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(Hi Lee,
Ok as per discussion that day with Mrs Lew and yourself, suggest to give Nirwana RM300 discount on rental due to misunderstanding/miscommunication from both party (not only from our side) but as a gesture of goodwill to Nirwana and we are looking for long term biz relationship, we offer RM300 discount from rental.
We never want to have a policy to provide maid services nor sharing the fees for such services.
________________________________________________________________________________
after i draft the letter as below....
Attention: Mr. S.M.Thana
Dear Sirs,
Re: RM400 Rental Discount.
1st.....
(Hi Lee,
Ok as per discussion that day with Mrs Lew and yourself, suggest to give Nirwana RM300 discount on rental due to misunderstanding/miscommunication from both party (not only from our side) but as a gesture of goodwill to Nirwana and we are looking for long term biz relationship, we offer RM300 discount from rental.
We never want to have a policy to provide maid services nor sharing the fees for such services.
________________________________________________________________________________
after i draft the letter as below....
Attention: Mr. S.M.Thana
Dear Sirs,
Re: RM400 Rental Discount.
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If I understand your situtation, you wish to make sure that your letter to Mr. Thana is clear and complete. " Is this correct?
- If I understand your situtation, you wish to make sure that your letter to Mr.
- Thana is clear and complete.
- " Is this correct?
- If so, here is how I would word your letter to Mr.
- Thana.
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If I understand your situtation, you wish to make sure that your letter to Mr. Thana is clear and complete. You are not looking to send a different memo to your boss other than the one that begins "Hi, Lee...." Is this correct? If so, here is how I would word your letter to Mr. Thana. The crossouts are the original words I deleted. The boldface are the words or punctuation I added.
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