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Geybou Posted 20 years ago
Grammar

relative pronoun misplacing?

Hi,

If I want to indicate the product A's sale represents 40% of the company revenue in 2004 in the following sentence, how can it be done?

"In 1999 the product A's sale represented 20% of the company revenue that rose to 40% in 2004."

I think in the above sentence "...revenue that rose to 40% ..." mis-indicates the revenue rose to 40% not the product A's sale as the "that" relative pronoun refers to "revenue", correct?

Thank you
  

Top answer

You are correct that the sentence is not saying what you want it to. Here are some alternatives. In 1999 Product A's sale represented 20% of the company's revenue.

— CalifJim

  • You are correct that the sentence is not saying what you want it to.
  • Here are some alternatives.
  • In 1999 Product A's sale represented 20% of the company's revenue.
  • That rose to 40% in 2004.
  • The sale of Product A represented 20% of the company's revenue in 1999 and 40% in 2004.
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You are correct that the sentence is not saying what you want it to.

Here are some alternatives.

In 1999 Product A's sale represented 20% of the company's revenue. That rose to 40% in 2004.
The sale of Product A represented 20% of the company's revenue in 1999 and 40% in 2004.
The sale of Product A represented 20% of the company's revenue in 1999, rising to 40%
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