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Kireina NuNu Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Reflective Essay (NEED HELP)

A person needs to achieve certain goals in one’s life before you can call them successful. Success is to achieve the certain goals you have set. I have set personal and professional goals. My professional goals in life is to find a good job that can make me happy, get a fufilling education, and find a job that support me and my daughter, besides help other people. I want to be a Registered Nurse. My career is very well-rounded. I know that in the beginning it may be hard, but I have to continue it. After getting to my top goal of becoming a Registered Nurse, I want to start building a family and design my own house. In general, those are my main top aspirations.

After being in Human Relations, I have learned a variety of strengths. Before, I had low self-esteem. I felt sad and depressed because I never fit in with everyone else. I was never the one in the spotlight because people have always disrespected me. They made me feel low besides the name calling. I have learned to be more open-minded, sociable, and reasonable with people. I have really came out of my shell. I'm usually shy and timid. I don't usually trust anyone, it takes me a good couple of years for me to put trust in someone. I have a higher self esteem level.

I now possess the skills to understand myself, others and those who are going to be around me in the workplace. Self awarness and learning new communication skills was very important to me. Learning how to start conversations, understand their situations, and coping with stress was vital. It was a key asset that I needed to push away from because stress is nothing but degrading to the human soul. Motivation from my teachers, friends and family members is what I needed. I love getting motivated about doing a certain project or meeting new people. Mutual Respect is one of the subjects that I focused on because I never heard of it. I dug deeper and learned that it means, not only respect but your self esteem level has to stable for it to even exist. These were my main two obstacles. I struggled with low self esteem and I constantly saw myself being the huge mistake in life. I had very negative thoughts about myself, which reflected my negative self esteem level. If I saw myself in that manner, that is the way others would see me too. Even if I thought as myself as wise, smart and cute, others would constantly downgrade me. In my years, I just left my self esteem where it was at because other people are going to have their own opinion. I have called that the looking-glass stage.

In this class, I have redefined my self concept and my self esteem has heightened. I feel beautiful and intelligent. Learning how to envision my future self and dig deeper inside has made me find out that I need to ignore others and what they say. I have a job to do and I can't let them lower me anymore because it will negatively effect me. When I walk into the room, I want others to feel comfortable and stable around me. My self image is defined only by me now. I can finally look into the mirror and stare at my well-being without wanting to be like everyone else. Even though my self-esteem was low, my work ethic continued to grow. More and more, I wanted to show teachers that I strived for greatness. This had no effect on my work performance. My specific talents are mainly showing my teachers that I want to learn. I don't want you to bore me to death. I want teachers to show me interesting ways to excel in their class. In groups, I can study positive people and their attitudes without making false judgements about them. Having an overall good attitude period is good enough for me. By taking this human relations class, I have grown out of my shell. By growing out of my shell, when I achieve my goal of becoming a nurse, I will have the perfect communication skills to deal with any patient. I want them to remember me as the best nurse. I want them to talk to me, tell me what I can do to make their day go by a little more easier. I want my patient's faces to glow up once I come into the room because they already know that I am always going to take care of them to the best of my ability. My personality has completely changed, and overall my self esteem has been raised. I feel as though I can go out into the open world and achieve anything that I want to. I have accepted my own self. I don't have to listen to the negativity anymore. When I walk into the classroom, I no longer hear those insecure voices. This class has turned me into a new person. The only thing I have to do is continue to pursue my dream and I know that I will be a caring, well-rounded and warm-hearted mother and nurse.
  

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Hi Kireina NuNu; I assumed that you want some feedback on your essay, so I have added some comments. The yellow highlighted areas need specific attention. In general, the essay is not as organized as it could be.

  • Hi Kireina NuNu; I assumed that you want some feedback on your essay, so I have added some comments.
  • The yellow highlighted areas need specific attention.
  • In general, the essay is not as organized as it could be.
  • It jumps around a lot, especially when you talk about your attitudes toward yourself.
  • There is also a lot of repetition.
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Hi Kireina NuNu;

I assumed that you want some feedback on your essay, so I have added some comments. The yellow highlighted areas need specific attention.

In general, the essay is not as organized as it could be. It jumps around a lot, especially when you talk about your attitudes toward yourself. There is also a lot of repetition.

You should have one thesis for you

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