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Petusek Posted 14 years ago
Grammar
Reference, deixis, cohesion
Hello,
Please, could somebody possibly suggest some improvements?
The possessive their refers (or should refer) to the users in user group settings (the list item just before), but his doesn't seem to be a clear and unambiguous formulation. It may well even be incorrect...
Any other corrections are welcome and highly appreciated too!
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Complete Security
The wide variety of access rights, user group settings, and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, form an essential tool for a [product name] administrator. Besides the precise definition at the rights level inside the program, data can be analogically safeguarded from its misuse at the server and network level.
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Many thanks in advance,
P.
Please, could somebody possibly suggest some improvements?
The possessive their refers (or should refer) to the users in user group settings (the list item just before), but his doesn't seem to be a clear and unambiguous formulation. It may well even be incorrect...
Any other corrections are welcome and highly appreciated too!
"...
Complete Security
The wide variety of access rights, user group settings, and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, form an essential tool for a [product name] administrator. Besides the precise definition at the rights level inside the program, data can be analogically safeguarded from its misuse at the server and network level.
..."
Many thanks in advance,
P.
Top answer
Hi, How about this? The wide variety o f user group settings and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, forms an essential tool for a [product name] administrator. The same is true of access rights .
- Hi, How about this?
- The wide variety o f user group settings and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, forms an essential tool for a [product name] administrator.
- The same is true of access rights .
- Besides the precise definition at the rights level inside the program, data can be analogically safeguarded against misuse at the server and network level.
- Clive
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Hi,
How about this?
The wide variety of user group settings and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, forms an essential tool for a [product name] administrator. The same is true of access rights. Besides the precise definition at the r
How about this?
The wide variety of user group settings and their permissions to print documents, view data and modify entries, forms an essential tool for a [product name] administrator. The same is true of access rights. Besides the precise definition at the r
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Thanks a lot, Clive, that's a brilliant suggestion! I wish I could give you more than just one point!
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