Reeling
I wrote this:
Sam, Tim and Paul, each with a beer in hand, stand outside the bar, casually watching two guys throwing punches at each other. Both are reeling, but still swinging. Finally, one of them falls to the ground, unconscious. The other runs to a car, gets in, and flees the scene.
Is this paragraph (in particular the bold-face part) OK or is there anything you would change? Is reeling perfect here if I imagine the men are barely able to stay on their feet because they are very exhausted and hurt from taking a lot of hits? Thanks.
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anonymous Is this paragraph (in particular the bold-face part) OK or is there anything you would change? Is reeling perfect here if I imagine the men are barely able to stay on their feet because they are very exhausted and hurt from taking a lot of hits? Thanks.
- anonymous Is this paragraph (in particular the bold-face part) OK or is there anything you would change?
- Is reeling perfect here if I imagine the men are barely able to stay on their feet because they are very exhausted and hurt from taking a lot of hits?
- Thanks.
- That's fine.
- There are unnecessary commas throughout, but poetic license applies in such writing.
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anonymousIs this paragraph (in particular the bold-face part) OK or is there anything you would change? Is reeling perfect here if I imagine the men are barely able to stay on their feet because they are very exhausted and hurt from taking a lot of hits? Thanks.
That's fine. There are unnecessary commas throughout, but poetic license applies in such writing
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