Reductions

Hi
I've written a sentence using "reductions"; I'm wondering whether it's right:

"Returning home from work, entirely fatigued, one finds home a safe haven of peace and tranquility in which alongside his or her family they can soothe their mind and nerves."

What I wanna know is that using ", entirely fatigued," after "returning home from work" in a reduction form like that is right or not.
I would appreciate your help.