Really need help for my motivation letter. asap

hi, im writing the letter of motivation for university, as my english is quite bad, i would be happy if you could help me a bit.
and ya, i would be really happy about some tips, any tips, and Im quite out of time.

sorry for haoss,

i know the letter is not good, but is it at leas ok, can i send something like that, or there are no chance for me?

Name Surname
Address
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Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my interest in applying for a program International Relations in University of XXX. I think that I am an appropriate candidate for many reasons.

Firstly (Name of Country) seems to be a perfect place to spend my study years. I decided to study abroad because now I am living abroad during my European Voluntary Service. And since I am here in (Name of Country), I have had the most amazing experience – I have gained new knowledge, new friends and even new future plans/dreams. As I live, work and spend my free time in very international community (mostly with 11 other volunteers and each of them comes from different European country), I have realized how really different people are and how geographical borders actually change personality and the way of living and thinking. Secondly, study program International Relations in my opinion is the best program where I could imagine myself realizing my greatest potential. I think that University of XX is one of the many who, rather than focusing just on one analytical approach or method, gives possibility to see the same events, affairs from at least three points of view – economics, politics and history. I believe that it has never been more important to be informed about International affairs than today, in the time when everything changes so fast and critically. In order to collect more knowledge about past events, other countries, society, politics, I need the best education possible and I am sure that University of Groningen can provide it to me. As well I want to keep living in an international environment and expose myself to people from different countries and cultures. I also love traveling because it gives me opportunities to meet new people and develop my communication skills.

In terms of my personality I must say that I am committed to, and love organization. I love to help others, regardless of whether it is daily work or just warm conversations. At gymnasium I participated actively in Student council (Event management team), attended climbing lessons. These activities taught me the value of teamwork, communication and time management. As well I have gained experience to feel free to express my opinion and take a criticism. I started to live alone when I was 13, because I got in the one of the best gymnasiums in (Name of Country) and it was not located in the city where my family lives. In theses last 7 years, since I live alone, I have become very responsible, practical, and do not get tired of taking care of everyday problems. According to the others I am cheerful and good heart person. I love challenges, it makes person stronger and more confident. From life I want to get as much as I can. I never give up, I believe, desire and I seek a better future.

In concussion I need to say that I think that University of XXX with its old traditions and high qualified staff combined with my greatest academic and social skills would make a great team, and both sides would be happy about this union. (im really not sure if you can write something like that , sounds really big-headed, doesnt?)


Thank you very much for considering my application. I look forward to your positive response.

Sincerely,

Name Surname