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Question: Tobacco is a kind of drug. People have been free to use it. Some people think that it should be illegal to use it comparing with other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What is your opinion?

Every year, thousands of people die from smoking and some of them involuntarily breath it in. Despite this, I do not agree with the policy that we should ban smoking. However, I also believe that there should be regulations on its use. In the following paragraphs, I will shall put forth my arguments to support my views.

It is irrefutable that drugs bring lots of harm to people and society. First of all, it causes diseases such as lung cancer, heart disease and other illnesses. Drugs do not only harm to only individuals but also others, especially the smoker's family. Drug abuse can create crime and frequent drug users can meet the increasing expense for their habit. Moreover, people who addicted to drugs inevitable have some personality changes. They will fin difficulty in meeting the responsibilities of a job or their family. Teenagers who experience drugs tend to lose interest in school and their social activities.

Nonetheless, it costs society far more to prohibit than it does to regulate it, and I am not just talking about money. Making tobacco illegal can create organized crime, which leads to street wars or police corruption. With more violence comes more police, and that means more cost. Regulation on the other hand, works quite well. The government should have their rights in deciding who make it, who sell it and who it is sold to. In addition, there should be controls regarding potency, packaging and advertising. This is definitely better than banning a drug.

Tobacco also plays an important role in contributing to sources of money belongs to a country. These income comes from taxes on the manufactured products. Excise taxes also come from tobacco that arrives from other countries. Finally, I believe that it is necessary to educate people about the harms of tobacco. This approach has worked better in many countries and there has been a reduction in the sale of tobacco products.

In conclusions, making tobacco illegal is not a good idea. Drug prohibition has been one of the most failed social policy and banning tobacco is a step backwards. However, there should be control on the manufacturing and sale of tobacco.

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