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Contiluo Posted 9 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Real world

Please help me make the paragraph below sound natural. Thanks a lot.

Technological gadgets have posed a bad impact on social relationships. These days, children and teenagers spend an average of 7 hours a day on electronic devices, restraining them from doing some outdoor activities. They don’t have the time to communicate with their parents. Therefore, there is not enough interaction between the children and the parents. Instead, they prefer to connect with their friends in the virtual world through text messaging, chatting, rather than meeting them. They have lost interest in interacting with other people, and thus they have difficulty socializing with real world. This is one of the most common gadget addiction problems in every household.

  

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I think it's really well written. You supported your statement with reasoning, examples and statistics. I'm new to this forum but I'm an American native speaker.

  • I think it's really well written.
  • You supported your statement with reasoning, examples and statistics.
  • I'm new to this forum but I'm an American native speaker.
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I think it's really well written. You supported your statement with reasoning, examples and statistics. I'm new to this forum but I'm an American native speaker.

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