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Thanks, would anyone else would like to edit to make it better?

Mountain · Accepted Answer

Ok, I have finished with the paper and also made some corrections. Please feel free to adjust anything that you think will make it sounds better. Thanks in advance!

PS: My main goal was to provide detailed information on Responsible Investment and why it is important.<---In this case, I don't feel very confident about shareholder activism...
Social Responsible Investment (SRI) has three different dynamic strategies, which often are combined. The most well known is social screening, but in my opinion the other two are just as important, shareholder activism and community investment. Basically, what it means is that these strategies are used to incorporate our personal values and concern for society into our investment and financial decisions.

According to www.socialinvest.org, social screening is “the practice of including, excluding, or evaluating publicly traded securities from investment portfolios or mutual funds based on social or environment criteria.” With that being said, social screening can either be positive or negative. Positive screens seek the most progressive companies, while negative screens avoid specific companies. An example of negative screening would be companies that cause illness, damage the environment, and deceptive business practices. While positive screens eliminates negative and seeks out ways to maximize investment returns. Ask yourself if you want to invest in companies that causes harm to society or ones that will make you money, and let you sleep well? I personally would not want to be an investor in something that goes against my morals.

Corporate Governance Glossary defines shareholder activism as “A group or individual that takes action in an effort to influence management and effect change in the behavior of corporations to increase shareholder value.” http://www.corp-gov.org/. From my understanding of “Shareholder Activism: The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly” by Donohue, shareholder activists target companies because of their size as well as specific stakeholder related practices. The article shows that shareholder activists target companies with shareholder resolutions demanding changes in corporate behavior for companies producing problematic products and where environmental concerns exist. Furthermore, companies in specific industries are targeted based on poor employee and community related practices.

We have discussed social screening, shareholder and now last but not least, community investing. What is community investing? Based on www.socialfunds.com “Community investing addresses the financial needs of low income and underserved communities.” According to the definition, even though community investing generally delivers a below market financial yield, but I believe in turn could provide a strong social return. A community investor may, for example, open a checking account, saving account, money market account, by doing that, the investor is helping the bank loaning out money to low and moderate income families. In general, community investment strives to development strong and healthy communities by serving those areas that are needed.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Overall, it looks fine, Mountain, including the section of shareholder activism. I have fixed some minor puntuation, etc and made some suggestions for rephrasing. The question marks indicate suggested changes that I am not sure preserve your meaning.

Socially Responsible Investment (SRI) has three different dynamic strategies, which are often combined. The best known is social screening, but in my opinion the other two are just as important: shareholder activism and community investment. Basically, these three strategies are used to incorporate our personal values and concern for society into our investment and financial decisions.
According to www.socialinvest.org, social screening is “the practice of including, excluding, or evaluating publicly traded securities from investment portfolios or mutual funds based on social or environment criteria.” Social screening can be either positive or negative. Positive screenings seek the most progressive companies, while negative screenings avoid specific companies. Examples of negative screening would be of companies that cause illness, damage the environment, or reveal deceptive business practices. Meanwhile, positive screenings eliminate negative factors (?) and seek ways to maximize investment returns. Ask yourself whether you want to invest in companies that causes harm to society or in ones that will make you money and let you sleep well? I personally would not want to be an investor in an activity (?) that goes against my ethics.

The Corporate Governance Glossary defines shareholder activism as “a group or individual that takes action in an effort to influence management and effect change in the behavior of corporations to increase shareholder value.”( http://www.corp-gov.org/. ) From my understanding of “Shareholder Activism: The Good, the Bad, and the Ugly” by Donohue, shareholder activists target companies because of their size as well as their specific stakeholder-related practices. The article shows that shareholder activists target companies with shareholder resolutions demanding changes in corporate behavior for companies producing problematic products and where environmental concerns exist. Furthermore, companies in specific industries are targeted based on poor employee- and community-related practices.
We have discussed social screening, shareholder activism, and now community investing. What is community investing? Based on www.socialfunds.com : “Community investing addresses the financial needs of low income and underserved communities.” According to the definition, even though community investing generally delivers a below-market financial yield, it could also provide a strong social return. A community investor may, for example, open a checking account, saving account or money market account; by doing that, the investor is helping the bank loan out money to low- and moderate-income families. In general, community investment strives for strong and healthy development (?).

Mountain · Answer

Mister, I thank you so much for what you have done. We need more people like you in this forum because I don't see that many people are doing this.

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