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Julielai Posted 20 years ago
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Re: My article, please criticize

0Spotted some glaring errors for you. If you fix it, I'll look at it again.01blockquote
01cite10Strazdins12cite10I had to write a short article describing my town. And criticizm and feedback appreciated.12br
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10 It was 800 years back when the beautiful name ”Cesis” first appeared in historical documents. Cesis could be best described as a small and soulful town with a lot of 11b10culture12b10 since it has gone through the Livonian time, the Brothers of Swords and other Middle Age 11b10labels12b10. As an inhabitant of Cesis, I can definitely be proud because it’s a town with both 11font10–12font10 a past and a future, which make it so special.12br
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10 There is definitely a beauty that makes Cesis appealing to 11u11b10a 12b12u10large number of folks that come here. All as one, tourists take time to visit the gorgeous Castle Park, which leaves an impression with 11i11b10it’s12b12i10 spectacular and unique old castle, which is surrounded by 11b10resplendent and vivid12b10 (wording) grass, limes, firs and a pond that makes one sit down and enjoy the fabulous sight.12br
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10 Moreover, Cesis is not just for retired people that want to sit down and 11b10breath (sp.)12b10. To the contrary, Cesis offers a wide range of facilities, including nightclubs, cafes, restaurants, 11b10museum (only one?)12b10, children playgrounds, swimming 11b10pool12b10, gyms, biathlon and snowboarding tracks, which all 11b10contribute12b10 (wording) a compound destination for folks from all walks of life. 12br
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10 One will always find himself having something to do in Cesis – whether it’s skiing, going to concerts, enjoying nightlife or simply sitting in the park11b10, (what depends?) 12b10depends on a taste of amusement. It is definitely one of the most 11b10worth-a-visit 12b10towns in Latvia. Take a deep breath and explore!12br
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0 Thanks, I did some editing. 02br 02br 01font 01b 00A mix of everything02b 02font 02br 02br 00 It was 800 years back when the beautiful name ”Cesis” first appeared in historical documents. Cesis could be best described as a small and soulful town with a rich culture since it has gone through the Livonian time, the Brothers of Swords and other Middle Age significances.

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  • 0 Thanks, I did some editing.
  • 02br 02br 01font 01b 00A mix of everything02b 02font 02br 02br 00 It was 800 years back when the beautiful name ”Cesis” first appeared in historical documents.
  • Cesis could be best described as a small and soulful town with a rich culture since it has gone through the Livonian time, the Brothers of Swords and other Middle Age significances.
  • 02br 02br 00 There is definitely a beauty that makes Cesis appealing to a large number of folks that come here.
  • 02br 02br 00 Moreover, Cesis is not just for retired people that want to sit and breath.
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0 Thanks, I did some editing. Here's how it looks now.02br
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01cite10Strazdins12cite10Thanks, I did some editing. Here's how it looks now.12br
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10 It was 800 years back when the beautiful name ”Cesis” first appeared in historical documents. Cesis
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0 01b00Livonian and Brothers of Swords both are medieval medals of battle.02br
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0 I did some more editing, but I wouldn't like to leave out those adjectives since the article needs to be as descriptive as possible, making one feel it. Also, what's wrong with 01b00it's 02b00on the 2nd paragraph?02br
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0You may want to review the difference between its and it's. 02br
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00Most of the things highlighted still need to be fixed.0-
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