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Actually the topic of essay is about whether natural talent is required or not...discuss in both views...don look for the answer related to topic jus see out for coherence ,grammatical errors sthn like tat...
here it is...
"In this world,there are people considered to be having various talents in them.It can be broadly said that , these talents differ from one person to another. Infact, each person in this world has some talent which others might not have.These talents or skills would have aroused in them, as a result of some intensive training and teaching or naturally.It is to be believed that, Each individual does have some natural talent in them.
One might have acquired some sort of talent because of the reasin that,it would be taught for them during their childhood days.For instance, take some sports as an example.The individual who has learnt some talent will obviously find it difficult to compete with someone who had it naturally in that area.
It is to be noted that,not in all circumstances,the natural talents will behave advantageous over other persons.If a naturally skilled individual does not practice their skills nor acquire more knowledge about it, will be nowhere nearer to the individual who had practised it to perfection.This clearly states that people who doesn't have some natural skills in them can obtain it with some good teaching and motivation techniques.
It can be concluded by saying , natural skills doenot claim that much height, unless it is practiced well.Natural skills aalong with a good teaching and proper training will make that individual perfectly shaped over others.Anyone in this world can acquire any sort of skills or talent , but will be noticed inferior to the ones who had naturally done well."