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Anonymous Posted 21 years ago
Grammar

Quick Grammer question.. please help

Hello, I need a quick grammer check here. What I have just doesn't look right and this is going to be published so I want to make sure it's perfect.


Roxann joined the Rogue Rage team because herself, her partner and several friends started mountain biking last year, with a preference in riding trails and exploring areas of Manitoba.

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Roxann joined the Rogue Rage team because she , her partner and several friends started mountain biking last year, with a preference for riding trails and exploring areas of Manitoba. I'm quite unclear about what exactly you are attempting to show as the cause of her joining the team. Did Roxann join the team because she started mountain biking last year, or because she started mountain biking with her partner and several friends, or because she has a year's experience, or because her preference is for mountain biking in Manitoba?

— Davkett

  • Roxann joined the Rogue Rage team because she , her partner and several friends started mountain biking last year, with a preference for riding trails and exploring areas of Manitoba.
  • I'm quite unclear about what exactly you are attempting to show as the cause of her joining the team.
  • Did Roxann join the team because she started mountain biking last year, or because she started mountain biking with her partner and several friends, or because she has a year's experience, or because her preference is for mountain biking in Manitoba?
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Roxann joined the Rogue Rage team because she, her partner and several friends started mountain biking last year, with a preference for riding trails and exploring areas of Manitoba.

I'm quite unclear about what exactly you are attempting to show as the
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DavkettRoxann joined the Rogue Rage team because she, her partner and several friends started mountain biking last year, with a preference for riding trails and exploring areas of Manitoba.

I'm quite unclear about what exactly y
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I'm at a bit of a disadvantage from knowing nothing about the Rogue Rage team. The most I can assume is that The Rogue Rage team is a group of mountain bikers, who are probably well-known somewhere for extended group touring of mountainous regions (in Canada?).

Does this help?--

Inspired by a year of experience in mountain biking with her partner and a gr
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Perfect! Thank you so much! You've got the right idea about the team, however I don't think they are well known as it's a team put together to raise money for a charity ride.

Thanks again!

Jenna
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And it's spelt "grammar".
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