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Anonymous Posted 20 years ago
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I am writing a college application essay and here is one of the sentence.
"The trivial undertakings of my adolescent years are numerous as they are frivolous, and yet wrapped around this enigma arises the greatest accomplishment of my short life. "
is there something wrong with this sentence? my friend says the "are numerous" part need changing?
"The trivial undertakings of my adolescent years are numerous as they are frivolous, and yet wrapped around this enigma arises the greatest accomplishment of my short life. "
is there something wrong with this sentence? my friend says the "are numerous" part need changing?
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Grammatically, it should read are as numerous as . However, to be candid, the whole sentence should be scrapped, as it is far too rococo. I hope your whole letter is not in this style-- unless you are applying to a Nigerian college.
- Grammatically, it should read are as numerous as .
- However, to be candid, the whole sentence should be scrapped, as it is far too rococo.
- I hope your whole letter is not in this style-- unless you are applying to a Nigerian college.
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Grammatically, it should read are as numerous as.
However, to be candid, the whole sentence should be scrapped, as it is far too rococo. I hope your whole letter is not in this style-- unless you are applying to a Nigerian college.
However, to be candid, the whole sentence should be scrapped, as it is far too rococo. I hope your whole letter is not in this style-- unless you are applying to a Nigerian college.
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