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Dear all,Kindly correct the following text."I wish to inform that I arrived in Dubai on a five day trip with my wife Soney and younger son Ashish. I will be returning on the evening of Sunday December 29. This is mainly for the information of my cousins in UAE. I am returning to Dubai after a long gap of 41 and half years. This is my fourth visit."Thank you.

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cat navy 425"I wish to inform that I arrived in Dubai on a five day trip with my wife Soney and younger son Ashish. I will be returning on the evening of Sunday December 29. This is mainly for the information of my cousins in UAE. I am returning to Dubai after a long gap of 41 and half years. This is my fourth visit."

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I wish to inform you, especially my cousins in the UAE, that I have just arrived in Dubai as part of a five-day trip with my wife Soney and younger son Ashish. My trip to Dubai will be my fourth visit, but it comes after a long gap of 41½ years. I will be returning on the evening of Sunday, December 29.

I've rearranged the order so that you have a logical flow of information as shown below.

1) Say who you are informing.
2) Talk about your arrival in Dubai.
3) Say who is with you.
4) Tell about previous trips to Dubai.
5) Say when you will return home from Dubai.

CJ

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