Punctuation before "while"

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Wondering what you all would change about this sentence. (FYI - I'm not using the Oxford comma.)

Companies today must capitalize on new ideas at the speed of business – while protecting against competitive threats, changing markets and shifting customer needs.

Philip · Accepted Answer

I would eliminate the -- and include the Oxford comma.

Anonymous · Answer

Thanks, Philip. I am constricted by AP style standards, which is why I'm not using the extra comma. As for the en dash, I agree. It was previously a comma and I was arguing that there should be no punctuation at that point in the sentence because there's no need for a pause and also because the dependent clause doesn't contrast the independent clause at the start of the sentence.

Philip · Answer

AnonymousI am constricted by AP style standards,

I taught AP French but had no experience with AP composition. In that case, just eliminate the dash. If it still feels uncomfortable, you might consider rearranging the entire structure, but that might seem artificial.

Clive · Answer

What does 'at the speed of business' mean? I think you need to clarify this phrase.

While protecting what? The new ideas?
If so, say . . . while protecting them against . . .

Or do you mean that the businesses have to protect themselves?
If so, say . . . while protecting themselves against . . .

Clive

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