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Firestar60615 Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing
Punctuate and capitolize.
Looking for a bit of help with this letter, punctuation and capitolization where needed.
This is what I started with:
Dear Mr Kinder
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening
Heres a bit of background information we didnt cover in our phone conversation KMS Financial
Services, Inc. has been in business since 1971 and is one of the largest Northwest based independent investment firms we offer one of the widest selections of socially responsible investments in the Northwest
Enclosed is the initial information you requested as a KMS representative in Seattle with over ten years experience in financial consulting I am pleased to assist you Ive been involved with socially responsible investing since 1983.
I look forward to hearing from you Mr. Kinder to discuss your investment and insurance program
please call me at 206-448-7737
Best regards
Eric A. Smith
Here is what I got:
Dear Mr. Kinder,
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening.
Here’s a bit of background information we didn’t cover in our phone conversation:
KMS Financial Services, Inc. has been in business since 1971 and is one of the largest Northwest based independent investment firms. We offer one of the widest selections of socially responsible investments in the Northwest.
Enclosed is the initial information you requested. As a KMS representative in Seattle with over ten years’ experience in financial consulting, I am pleased to assist you. I’ve been involved with socially responsible investing since 1983.
I look forward to hearing from you Mr. Kinder to discuss your investment and insurance program.
Please call me at 206-448-7737.
Best regards,
Eric A. Smith
This is what I started with:
Dear Mr Kinder
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening
Heres a bit of background information we didnt cover in our phone conversation KMS Financial
Services, Inc. has been in business since 1971 and is one of the largest Northwest based independent investment firms we offer one of the widest selections of socially responsible investments in the Northwest
Enclosed is the initial information you requested as a KMS representative in Seattle with over ten years experience in financial consulting I am pleased to assist you Ive been involved with socially responsible investing since 1983.
I look forward to hearing from you Mr. Kinder to discuss your investment and insurance program
please call me at 206-448-7737
Best regards
Eric A. Smith
Here is what I got:
Dear Mr. Kinder,
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening.
Here’s a bit of background information we didn’t cover in our phone conversation:
KMS Financial Services, Inc. has been in business since 1971 and is one of the largest Northwest based independent investment firms. We offer one of the widest selections of socially responsible investments in the Northwest.
Enclosed is the initial information you requested. As a KMS representative in Seattle with over ten years’ experience in financial consulting, I am pleased to assist you. I’ve been involved with socially responsible investing since 1983.
I look forward to hearing from you Mr. Kinder to discuss your investment and insurance program.
Please call me at 206-448-7737.
Best regards,
Eric A. Smith
Top answer
This looks pretty good. I would make a few additional changes. Mostly, I would separate the paragraphs with spaces.
- This looks pretty good.
- I would make a few additional changes.
- Mostly, I would separate the paragraphs with spaces.
- Dear Mr.
- Kinder, I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening.
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This looks pretty good. I would make a few additional changes. Mostly, I would separate the paragraphs with spaces.
Dear Mr. Kinder,
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening.
[space]
Here’s a bit of background information we didn’t cover in our phone conversation: [no space] KMS Financial Services, Inc. has been in bu
Dear Mr. Kinder,
I enjoyed talking with you on the phone last Wednesday evening.
[space]
Here’s a bit of background information we didn’t cover in our phone conversation: [no space] KMS Financial Services, Inc. has been in bu
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