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Coachpotato Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
proposal to the council.
Could you help me to correct this proposal? It's not completed yet, it's just part of it but I'd like to know how I am doing. Thanks in advance.
The aim of this proposal is to explain the reasons why the council's support is so necessary for our group in our struggle to raise an organization which will play an important role in our community among our youngsters.
Our group will be focused on providing a series of weekend activities, which would mean a controlled alternative to the typical ways of having fun that certain groups of teenagers have popularised and that so many worries have caused to the local mayor.
The intention is to cover the widest spectrum of likes and interests among our young people, offering a variety of activities ranging from all kind of sports to the most comitted to the community activities.
First of all, the most demanded at the moment are some new sports facilities in which at last a football, basketball or any other local team could flourish, and represent the locality, carrying our name proudly to the whole territory. The council's collaboration will be essential to fulfill this object as without its economic effort to provide these teams with proper facilities and equipment our restless efforts to train and encourage these possible future sportsmen will be futile.
The aim of this proposal is to explain the reasons why the council's support is so necessary for our group in our struggle to raise an organization which will play an important role in our community among our youngsters.
Our group will be focused on providing a series of weekend activities, which would mean a controlled alternative to the typical ways of having fun that certain groups of teenagers have popularised and that so many worries have caused to the local mayor.
The intention is to cover the widest spectrum of likes and interests among our young people, offering a variety of activities ranging from all kind of sports to the most comitted to the community activities.
First of all, the most demanded at the moment are some new sports facilities in which at last a football, basketball or any other local team could flourish, and represent the locality, carrying our name proudly to the whole territory. The council's collaboration will be essential to fulfill this object as without its economic effort to provide these teams with proper facilities and equipment our restless efforts to train and encourage these possible future sportsmen will be futile.
Top answer
Hi, I think this is very good. Your approach and your plans are expressed very clearly. Your grammar is not perfect, but I really don't think that matters very much.
- Hi, I think this is very good.
- Your approach and your plans are expressed very clearly.
- Your grammar is not perfect, but I really don't think that matters very much.
- I think people will understand your proposal very clearly.
- Best wishes, Clive
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Hi,
I think this is very good. Your approach and your plans are expressed very clearly.
Your grammar is not perfect, but I really don't think that matters very much. I think people will understand your proposal very clearly.
Best wishes, Clive
I think this is very good. Your approach and your plans are expressed very clearly.
Your grammar is not perfect, but I really don't think that matters very much. I think people will understand your proposal very clearly.
Best wishes, Clive
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Thank you Clive.
I was wondering if you could tell me where there are grammar mistakes, or at least the most important ones.
Thanks again for your answer
I was wondering if you could tell me where there are grammar mistakes, or at least the most important ones.
Thanks again for your answer
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Hi again,
I've suggested a few changes.
Clive
The aim of this proposal is to explain the reasons that the council's support is so necessary for our group in our struggle to raise an organization which will play an important role in our community among our y
I've suggested a few changes.
Clive
The aim of this proposal is to explain the reasons that the council's support is so necessary for our group in our struggle to raise an organization which will play an important role in our community among our y
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