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Mohammad Ramezani Posted 10 years ago
Letter Writing
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Dear Proofreader,
I will appreciate if you proofread my essay. Many thanks.
Your company plans to close the cafeteria and you are not happy about it. Write a letter to your employer, covered: 1) Telling him why employees don’t use cafeteria. 2)Explaining him you don’t want cafeteria to be closed. 3) Giving suggestions for improving cafeteria.
Dear Mr. Jones,
Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management team have decided to close down the cafeteria located on the west corner of the company’s main building. The cafeteria has been regarding somehow not being interesting to the staff. Presumably, the main reason would be disorganization of shop keeper as the cafeteria has been closed during lunch time. Additionally, there is not any special and delicious cake in the cafeteria and the menu is limited in the case of sandwiches.
Honestly, I will appreciate if your team change their decision of closing the cafeteria as this store is the only near store which I can dine. Closing it causes me to spend a double amount of time to go to another cafeteria, resulting in reduction in my productivity. This case is applicable for other employees as well. I will be grateful if you give the shopkeeper a suitable warning, forcing him to be organized and advising him to include some banana cakes and vegetarian sandwiches in the menu.
Thank you for your consideration,
Kind regards,
Daniel.
I will appreciate if you proofread my essay. Many thanks.
Your company plans to close the cafeteria and you are not happy about it. Write a letter to your employer, covered: 1) Telling him why employees don’t use cafeteria. 2)Explaining him you don’t want cafeteria to be closed. 3) Giving suggestions for improving cafeteria.
Dear Mr. Jones,
Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management team have decided to close down the cafeteria located on the west corner of the company’s main building. The cafeteria has been regarding somehow not being interesting to the staff. Presumably, the main reason would be disorganization of shop keeper as the cafeteria has been closed during lunch time. Additionally, there is not any special and delicious cake in the cafeteria and the menu is limited in the case of sandwiches.
Honestly, I will appreciate if your team change their decision of closing the cafeteria as this store is the only near store which I can dine. Closing it causes me to spend a double amount of time to go to another cafeteria, resulting in reduction in my productivity. This case is applicable for other employees as well. I will be grateful if you give the shopkeeper a suitable warning, forcing him to be organized and advising him to include some banana cakes and vegetarian sandwiches in the menu.
Thank you for your consideration,
Kind regards,
Daniel.
Top answer
I am going to concentrate on the grammar issues, not the ideas or style. Here are my suggested changes: Dear Mr. Jones, Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management team have has [singular] decided to close down the cafeteria located on the west corner of the company’s main building.
- I am going to concentrate on the grammar issues, not the ideas or style.
- Here are my suggested changes: Dear Mr.
- Jones, Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management team have has [singular] decided to close down the cafeteria located on the west corner of the company’s main building.
- The cafeteria has been regarding regarded somehow as not being interesting of interest to the staff.
- Presumably, the main reason would be the disorganization of the shop keeper as the cafeteria has been closed [often?
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I am going to concentrate on the grammar issues, not the ideas or style. Here are my suggested changes:
Dear Mr. Jones,
Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management teamhave has [singular] decided to close down the cafeteria located on the west corner of the company’s main building. The cafeteria has been regarding regarded
Dear Mr. Jones,
Recently, I have been informed that our company’s management team
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Thank you for your proofreading. I would appreciate if you provide me with the reason that why change in second body paragraph is not correct and shouldn't the tense of the verb be simple:
Honestly, I will appreciate it if your teamchange reversed their decision of closing to close the cafeteria.
My suggestion:
Honestly, I would
Honestly, I will appreciate it if your team
My suggestion:
Honestly, I would
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I suggested "reverse" instead of "change" because that is a more accurate verb. Change could be any of a number of decisions. They could replace the cafeteria with a vending machine. They could open once a month. They could have a mobile food vendor stop by. However, reverse means that they would go back to the way things were, which is what you seem to want.
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