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BW2/3 Posted 20 years ago
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When I went to a barbershop today, I wanted my hair cut only. As I immediately entered the door, someone welcomed me. I told her exactly what I wanted: short. She did not speak my dialect so we did not talk much. After my hair was cut, she wanted my hair wash. I was thinking she just washed away the falling hair yet she washed the whole thing. Then the barber had my mustache and beard shaved. It came to my mind there might be someone used the razor before. I really resented having them shaved. Minutes later she began to message my face. When the message was over, I sat back at the seat. She was beginning to clean my ears. I really hated it when she did that. I wished I had told her to stop. I was worried the stick that she used it for many times. As soon as she dried my hair, she gave me body message.

It was hard to conceive woman sometimes. I really did not know why the young doctor had a crash on me. I knew the moment when she started to interesting me when I went out to have my hair cut. I did not want to wait in the clinic for a long time.When I was walking in elevator, I saw her standing at the corner looking at me. As I went back to the clinic, the nurse called me immediately. She took me into a small room. I was waiting for the young doctor. She was examining me very carefully. She began to talk too much. I saw her cheek red, nose roughed, and her lip reds. She wanted me to come back in three months. When I was walking out the clinic, I saw the old doctor was jealous. It seemed to me he was kind of hostile.

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Hi, you know your writing is really improving, well done. When I went to a barbershop today, I wanted my hair cut only. As soon as I entered the door, someone welcomed me.

  • Hi, you know your writing is really improving, well done.
  • When I went to a barbershop today, I wanted my hair cut only.
  • As soon as I entered the door, someone welcomed me.
  • I told her exactly what I wanted: short.
  • She did not speak my dialect so we did not talk much.
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Hi, you know your writing is really improving, well done.

When I went to a barbershop today, I wanted my hair cut only. As soon as I entered the door, someone welcomed me. I told her exactly what I wanted: short. She did not speak my dialect so we did not talk much. After my hair was cut, she wanted to wash my hair. I was thinking she would just wash away the falling hair yet she washed
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Thank you very much for the fixing and the compliment.

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