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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
Grammar
Proofreading please
Could someone have a look on the below sentence and maybe point out some mistakes?
A selection of great drama series and documentaries featuring famous actors offers incredible stories that make your viewing worthwhile.
A selection of great drama series and documentaries featuring famous actors offers incredible stories that make your viewing worthwhile.
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Hi It's grammatically OK. My criticism would be that it does not engage the reader. Maybe there is not enough action in the sentence and it's a bit too long - Channel X are offering a great selection of drama and documentaries featuring famous actors and incredible stories.
- Hi It's grammatically OK.
- My criticism would be that it does not engage the reader.
- Maybe there is not enough action in the sentence and it's a bit too long - Channel X are offering a great selection of drama and documentaries featuring famous actors and incredible stories.
- It's well worth watching That's just my view Dave
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Hi
It's grammatically OK. My criticism would be that it does not engage the reader. Maybe there is not enough action in the sentence and it's a bit too long
- Channel X are offering a great selection of drama and documentaries featuring famous actors and incredible stories. It's well worth watching
That's just my view
Dave
It's grammatically OK. My criticism would be that it does not engage the reader. Maybe there is not enough action in the sentence and it's a bit too long
- Channel X are offering a great selection of drama and documentaries featuring famous actors and incredible stories. It's well worth watching
That's just my view
Dave
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