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Mohammad Ramezani Posted 10 years ago
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Some people think that the best way to run a business is within the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of a family run business?

The modern technology has contributed a fundamental change in ways people communicate with each other. It also has enabled people to establish their own business rather than working with a company. Self-emplyment and family run businesses help people to be more independent and increase their freedom. Nevertheless, tradepersons who work at home are at the stake of bankruptcy more compared to those working within a private or public sector.

To start with, performing business inside a home brings with it conveniece and freedom. There will be less dependent if an individual earn his or her own income rather than from an employer. The work-family conflicts decrease when people perform their profession besides their family. In addition, parents can spend more time with their children which reduces the hefty costs associated with child care. This method of earning capital, will reduce the congestion, resulting saving of time required for commuting from workplace to home.

On the other hand, family businesses are more prone to be collapsed due to lack of fund and consultancy. This case would be happened more often for those without extensive business experiences. By comparison, being employed within a well-established and big companies will bring with itself more security and networking. Having a contract with a public or private sector, ensures some benefits like pensions and salary increments. These options are not availabe in family business option.

In conclusion, family businesses provide more independency and more convenience while working in companies, especially international corporations, brings with it more connections and job security. In my view, working in a company has more advantages through providing fiscal benefits and related experiences with promoting social skills.
  

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The modern technology has contributed a fundamental change in ways people communicate with each other. It also has enabled people to establish their own business rather than working with a company. Self- emplyment and family run businesses help people to be more independent and increase their freedom.

  • The modern technology has contributed a fundamental change in ways people communicate with each other.
  • It also has enabled people to establish their own business rather than working with a company.
  • Self- emplyment and family run businesses help people to be more independent and increase their freedom.
  • Nevertheless, tradepersons who work at home are at the stake of bankruptcy more compared to those working within a private or public sector.
  • To start with, performing business inside a home brings with it conveniece and freedom.
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The modern technology has contributed a fundamental change in ways people communicate with each other. It also has enabled people to establish their own business rather than working with a company. Self-emplyment and family run businesses help people to be more independent and increase their freedom. Neve
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Thank you for your feedback. I try to rectify the highlighted text and will appreciate if you also recheck my revision.

The modern: Modern
Self-employment: Self-employed
tradepersons: tradespersons
at the stake: at stake/ at risk
within a private or public sector: within private or public sectors.
There will be dependent:

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