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Report on Sales Forecasts for XXX Electrical Ltd

Introduction

The aim of this report sets to compare the sales forecasts for three product areas for next year.

Findings

Unit sales of fridges are likely to remain at 5,000 during all four quarters of next year.

TV sales, on the other hand, will significantly increase during the second quarter from 10,000 to 15,000. Unit sales will remain at 15,000 during the third quarter and soar once again to 20,000 during the fourth quarter.

Unit sales of cookers, however, are likely to fluctuate, starting off at 5,000, sales will increase to 10,000 during the second and third quarter of next year, only to decrease to 5,000 unit sales during the fourth quarter.

Teechr · Accepted Answer

nekosamaThe aim of this report sets to compare

An aim can't set to do something. Say,
The aim of this report is to compare, etc.
or
This report compares, etc.

nekosamaremain at 5,000 ~~during all four quarters of~~ for the whole of next year.

or

nekosamaremain at 5,000 per ~~during all four~~ quarter ~~s of~~ next year.

nekosamawill significantly increase

You can't be sure of that. It's better to say, e.g.,
will (quite/very) likely/probably increase

nekosamastarting off at 5,000, sales will increase

nekosamaonly to decrease to 5,000

That phrasing doesn't work for forecasts; it works for commentary on past actions/events. Say, e.g.,
but will probably decrease to, etc.
or
but look set to decline to, etc.

nekosamato 5,000 units ~~sales~~ during the fourth quarter.

Make the appropriate changes and repost your report.

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