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Invitation for a three-month placement for students in BarryAlan Online Education Ltd.
Dear Sirs,

BarryAlan Online Education is a multinational company in the field of online learning. We offer specialized online courses in Computer Software. These courses are organized by government. As you are well aware, it is difficult nowadays to find suitable staff for companies. Thus we would like to offer placements for a short period to students from your business school.

The replacement job would require students to do research on certain topics. Some of the areas of market research would be: 1) New software required in the IT market
2) The relationship between the online courses and the growth of employment
3) Geographical areas and software

Market research involves a lot of confidence on the parts of students. an eye for details, a pleasing personality and assertive attitude would be a plus factor for a student working in the area of market research.

Connecting with people is another factor. Students must be able to get along well with employees of the company they are researching with. People Skills help students go deeper in the areas of marker research.

A job replacement like this would definitely be an added advantage to a student’s resume. It would give them great opportunities to gain experience in a short period. Valuable knowledge they gained from the courses will benefit the next step that they would like to take in his career.

Yours sincerely,

Nami Yoshita

Manager of Human Resources