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Nekosama Posted 10 years ago
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Report on visits to website and proposed marketing strategy

Introduction
The purpose of this report is to comment on the number of people visiting the company website in the last three months and propose a marketing strategy for the next three months.

Findings
Over the last 3 months, the number of visitors has increased by 650.
There are two reasons for the increase.
Firstly, we launched a newsletter for subscribers. Secondly, we ran a competition which was very popular in April.
With regard to costs, banners have cost 5,000 pounds a month but very few people seem to visit the website as a result of these.
On the other hand, the newsletter doesn’t cost anything but has helped to increase the number of visitors.

Recommendations
In order to increase the number of visitors, I would recommend that we continue with the newsletter and run more competitions and quizzes.
Besides, I also propose that we stop using banners and put more resources into setting up links with other sites to increase traffic.
  

Top answer

Secondly, we ran a competition in April which was very popula r. in April.

  • Secondly, we ran a competition in April which was very popula r.
  • in April.
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Secondly, we ran a competition in April which was very popular. in April.
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Maybe you use "moreover" instead of "besides"? I think that it will look a bit better. And "banners costed us 5000 of pounds a month but they vere not effective in attracting people to the website." instead of "with regard to costs, banners have cost 5,000 pounds a month but very few people seem to visit the website as a result of these."
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AnonymousMaybe you could use "moreover" instead of "besides."
Anonymous"banners cost ed us 5000
See corrections.
Anonymous5000 of pounds a month
That's very unnatural.
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Man you did pretty good job, I see how many hours you put in your work. I am working hard to have a claim or research question and I am still looking lol. *** job man

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