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Nekosama Posted 10 years ago
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Report on comparing three types of photocopiers
Firstly, of the three types of photocopiers, Carda, KD and Sebu, the expected running cost for the first two years of the Carda is the highest. However, its purchase price is the lowest which is slightly more than $600, and its warranty cost is at the mid-level among the three photocopiers.
Secondly, the warranty cost of the KD is the highest of the three at $200, but its purchase price is much lower than that of the Sebu which is $ 1,000 and the expected running cost of the KD is much less than that of the Carda which is $1,200.
Thirdly, the expected running cost of the Sebu is the highest of the three photocopiers. Nevertheless, its warranty cost and expected running cost cost the consumers the least.
Finally, the expected total cost of the Carda for initial 2-year period is $1,900, more than that of the KD and Sebu which both expected total cost are $ 1,800.
Report on comparing three types of photocopiers
Firstly, of the three types of photocopiers, Carda, KD and Sebu, the expected running cost for the first two years of the Carda is the highest. However, its purchase price is the lowest which is slightly more than $600, and its warranty cost is at the mid-level among the three photocopiers.
Secondly, the warranty cost of the KD is the highest of the three at $200, but its purchase price is much lower than that of the Sebu which is $ 1,000 and the expected running cost of the KD is much less than that of the Carda which is $1,200.
Thirdly, the expected running cost of the Sebu is the highest of the three photocopiers. Nevertheless, its warranty cost and expected running cost cost the consumers the least.
Finally, the expected total cost of the Carda for initial 2-year period is $1,900, more than that of the KD and Sebu which both expected total cost are $ 1,800.
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This is not well written. It is unnecessarily convoluted. I suggest you rewrite it in a more direct way, with each paragraph dealing with just one main theme.
- This is not well written.
- It is unnecessarily convoluted.
- I suggest you rewrite it in a more direct way, with each paragraph dealing with just one main theme.
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This is not well written. It is unnecessarily convoluted. I suggest you rewrite it in a more direct way, with each paragraph dealing with just one main theme.
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Hi Teechr,
My report was written according to this question and chart
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My report was written according to this question and chart
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