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Nekosama Posted 10 years ago
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Recently, whether students should take a gap year has aroused widespread concern in society.

Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows. First of all, gap year provides young people a good opportunity to broaden their horizon and enrich their experience. For example, they have to make decisions by their own when they are far away from their homes; young people can develop not their independence but also social adaptability during gap year.

Besides, the tuition fee has increased sharply these years, more and more students are feeling stressed when they are face with their high educational expenses. Gap year, to some extent, can bring students some considerable revenues. Young people can earn their tuition fee during gap year.
However, everything has pros and cons, and gap year is not an exception.

Some students find that it is difficult to find a job because the competence of students is not enough for them to cope with work requirements. In addition, some young people are so immature and inexperienced that they are likely to go astray. To make matters worse, some of them may end up never returning to their campus life.

In conclusion, from what has been discussed above, I think that the advantages of gap year outweigh its disadvantages. Therefore, young people should be encouraged to take a gap year to broaden their horizon.
  

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Recently, whether students should take a gap year has aroused widespread concern debate in society. Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows. First of all, a gap year provides young people a good opportunity to broaden their horizo ns and enrich their experience.

  • Recently, whether students should take a gap year has aroused widespread concern debate in society.
  • Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows.
  • First of all, a gap year provides young people a good opportunity to broaden their horizo ns and enrich their experience.
  • For example, they have to make decisions by on their own when they are far away from their hom e ; young people can develop not only their independenc e, but also their social adaptability during a gap year.
  • Besides, the tuition fe es has have increased sharpl y, these years, and more and more students are feeling stressed when they are fac ed with their high educational expenses.
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Recently, whether students should take a gap year has aroused widespread concern debate in society.

Generally, its advantages can be seen as follows. First of all, a gap year provides young people a good opportunity to broaden their horizons and enrich their experience. For example, they have to make decisions by on their own when they are
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they are easily cheated because they lack social experience. (for the explanation)Emotion: thinking
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nekosamathey are easily cheated because they lack social experience. (for the explanation)
Your explanation does not help solve this dilemma. Perhaps you meant something like this.

Some students will find that it is difficult to find a job before they graduate. They don't have a degree, which is required for many good j
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