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Mohammad Ramezani Posted 10 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Proofreading
Hi, I will appreciate if you proofread my letter. Thanks
You have recently started work in a new company: Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter
I hope everything on you and your family side will be great. I am writing to you to provide you about excellent news of myself. Recently, about one moth ago, I changed my career and now I am working as a leader of a process group in a well-known company named “Origin”. You know that through my previous job, I had improved my profile to a level of which a number of process engineering corporations contacted me, encouraging to work with them. My previous company, “BhP”, also faced economic issues which resulted in a lot of redundancies. Therefore, I decided to take this unique opportunity and have joined this amazing company.
Moreover, I got married. I bet you can guess who is my fortunate wife? Yes, Jane who I always talked with you about and ultimately she accepted my proposal after seeing my potential abilities.
I am enthusiastically waiting for your reply.
With love,
David
You have recently started work in a new company: Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter
- Explain why you changed jobs
- Describe your new job
- Tell him/her your other news
I hope everything on you and your family side will be great. I am writing to you to provide you about excellent news of myself. Recently, about one moth ago, I changed my career and now I am working as a leader of a process group in a well-known company named “Origin”. You know that through my previous job, I had improved my profile to a level of which a number of process engineering corporations contacted me, encouraging to work with them. My previous company, “BhP”, also faced economic issues which resulted in a lot of redundancies. Therefore, I decided to take this unique opportunity and have joined this amazing company.
Moreover, I got married. I bet you can guess who is my fortunate wife? Yes, Jane who I always talked with you about and ultimately she accepted my proposal after seeing my potential abilities.
I am enthusiastically waiting for your reply.
With love,
David
Top answer
Hey Mohammad! Overall, your letter gets your point across, but there are several errors and some of your phrases sound awkward to a native speaker. In particular, your opening, "I hope everything on you and your family side will be great", does not make much sense in English.
- Hey Mohammad!
- Overall, your letter gets your point across, but there are several errors and some of your phrases sound awkward to a native speaker.
- In particular, your opening, "I hope everything on you and your family side will be great", does not make much sense in English.
- " Additionally, you probably should not end a letter with "With love, David" unless you are writing either to your spouse or to a very close friend.
- I wish I could give you more advice, but sadly, I am not a teacher, only a normal native speaker!
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Hey Mohammad!
Overall, your letter gets your point across, but there are several errors and some of your phrases sound awkward to a native speaker. In particular, your opening, "I hope everything on you and your family side will be great", does not make much sense in English. A more correct phrase with the same sentiment would be, "I hope you and your family are doing well." Additionally,
Overall, your letter gets your point across, but there are several errors and some of your phrases sound awkward to a native speaker. In particular, your opening, "I hope everything on you and your family side will be great", does not make much sense in English. A more correct phrase with the same sentiment would be, "I hope you and your family are doing well." Additionally,
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