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Surfer Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
proofreading
Hello, everyone..,
Would you please proof-read the following for me?
Here's:
"In the beginning it was but a single room for both, men and women. But later, however, they splitted it into two by means of some sort of a partition which they installed inside the room. The partition extended from wall to wall and was aligned so as to divide the room into a 2-3 split. The smaller resultant room was didcated for men, and the other larger one for women, and since I was the only "men" then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself; not for long, though, as they later hired new employees and assigned them to that same office room."
Would you please proof-read the following for me?
Here's:
"In the beginning it was but a single room for both, men and women. But later, however, they splitted it into two by means of some sort of a partition which they installed inside the room. The partition extended from wall to wall and was aligned so as to divide the room into a 2-3 split. The smaller resultant room was didcated for men, and the other larger one for women, and since I was the only "men" then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself; not for long, though, as they later hired new employees and assigned them to that same office room."
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You have far too many unnecessary words. Originally, it was a single office for both men and women, but later, they split it into two with a partition that extended from wall to wall and divided it into a 2:3 split. The smaller room was for men and the larger one for women, and since I was the only man then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself.
- You have far too many unnecessary words.
- Originally, it was a single office for both men and women, but later, they split it into two with a partition that extended from wall to wall and divided it into a 2:3 split.
- The smaller room was for men and the larger one for women, and since I was the only man then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself.
- Not for long, though, as they soon assigned new employees to that same office.
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You have far too many unnecessary words.
Originally, it was a single office for both men and women, but later, they split it into two with a partition that extended from wall to wall and divided it into a 2:3 split. The smaller room was for men and the larger one for women, and since I was the only man then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself. Not for long, though, as they soon as
Originally, it was a single office for both men and women, but later, they split it into two with a partition that extended from wall to wall and divided it into a 2:3 split. The smaller room was for men and the larger one for women, and since I was the only man then, I got to enjoy all the space by myself. Not for long, though, as they soon as
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