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Hi,my essay was given me back with feedback "MANY MANY grammatical mistakes" a with recommendation to give my essay to someone for proofreading. Could you help me, please?This paper will deal with two essays on G. M. Hopkins and his writings, written by Susan Chambers and Nathan A. Cervo, and about an impact, which these essays have on understanding a meaning of Hopkins’s poems.         In her essay, Susan Chambers focuses on G. M. Hopkins as on a poet. Through many examples of Hopkins’s poems (especially “The Wreck of the Deutschland”) she is trying to point out “his strange stylistic intensity” (Chambers 10). According to Chambers, Hopkins’s experiments with language are the thing that makes his poems to seem modern. She also promotes that “Hopkins wanted his religious convictions to be like the best kind of poem or the best kind of passion: always fresh, always new, always arriving to his heart and his intelligence with the ecstatic intensity of the moment he first felt them as convictions“ (29). Arriving at conviction and the meaning of conviction itself to Hopkins is also an important part of this essay.         As far as I am concern, I can only agree with an assertion that Hopkins’s poems are timeless. Reading of Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” has a specific effect on reader even since the first line of the poem and the cause is the sound and the meaning of the words.         Nathan A. Cervo focuses rather on Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” than on Hopkins’s writings as a whole. He puts together words “bow-bend” and “buckle” used in this poem, and interprets their double meaning and their references to Hopkins’s strong Christian belief.Thank you!

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

I have underlined some problem areas and struck out inappropriate verbiage. Please post your revised text:

This paper will deal with two essays on G. M. Hopkins and his writings, written by Susan Chambers and Nathan A. Cervo, and about an impact, which these essays have on understanding a meaning of Hopkins’s poems.

In her essay, Susan Chambers focuses on G. M. Hopkins as on a poet. Through many examples of Hopkins’s poems (especially “The Wreck of the Deutschland”) she is trying to point out “his strange stylistic intensity” (Chambers 10). According to Chambers, Hopkins’s experiments with language are the thing that makes his poems to seem modern. She also promotes that “Hopkins wanted his religious convictions to be like the best kind of poem or the best kind of passion: always fresh, always new, always arriving to his heart and his intelligence with the ecstatic intensity of the moment he first felt them as convictions“ (29). Arriving at conviction and the meaning of conviction itself to Hopkins is also an important part of this essay.

~~As far as I am concern, I can only agree with an assertion that~~ Hopkins’s poems are timeless. Reading of Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” has a specific effect on reader even since the first line of the poem and the cause is the sound and the meaning of the words.

Nathan A. Cervo focuses rather on Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” than on Hopkins’s writings as a whole. He puts together words “bow-bend” and “buckle” used in this poem, and interprets their double meaning and their references to Hopkins’s strong Christian belief.

Anonymous · Answer

Thank you for your advice. I tried to do my best to revise my text according to it.

This paper will deal with two essays on G. M. Hopkins and his writings, written by Susan Chambers and Nathan A. Cervo, and about the impact which these essays have on understanding the meaning of Hopkins’s poems.
In her essay, Susan Chambers focuses on G. M. Hopkins as a poet. Through many examples of Hopkins’s poems (especially The Wreck of the Deutschland) she tries to point out “his strange stylistic intensity” (Chambers 10). According to Chambers, the reason why Hopkins’s poems seem modern is his experiments with language. She also points out that “Hopkins wanted his religious convictions to be like the best kind of poem or the best kind of passion: always fresh, always new, always arriving to his heart and his intelligence with the ecstatic intensity of the moment he first felt them as convictions“ (29). Arriving at conviction and the meaning of conviction itself to Hopkins is also an important part of this essay.
Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” does have a specific effect on a reader, especially because of the sound and the meaning of the words. And this is why Hopkins’s poems still have an impact on today’s generation.
Nathan A. Cervo focuses on Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” rather than on Hopkins’s writings as a whole. He connects an expression “bow-bend” with an expression “buckle” used in this poem and interprets their double meaning and their references to Hopkins’s strong Christian belief.

Mister Micawber · Answer

You have improved it. I have improved it some more by eliminating unnecessary verbiage:

This paper will deal with two essays on Gerard Manley Hopkins, written by Susan Chambers and Nathan A. Cervo, and the impact which these essays have on understanding Hopkins’s poems.

In her essay, Chambers focuses on Hopkins as a poet. Through examples of his poems (especially The Wreck of the Deutschland) she points out “his strange stylistic intensity” (Chambers 10). According to Chambers, Hopkins’s poems seem modern because of his experiments with language. She also explains that Hopkins "wanted his religious convictions to be like the best kind of poem or the best kind of passion: always fresh, always new, always arriving to his heart and his intelligence with the ecstatic intensity of the moment he first felt them as convictions“ (29). Arriving at conviction and the meaning of conviction itself to Hopkins is also an important part of this essay.

Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” does have a specific effect on the reader, especially because of the sounds and meanings of the words, and his poems still have an impact on today’s generation. Cervo focuses on Hopkins’s poem “The Windhover” rather than on his writings as a whole. For example, Cervo connects the expressions“bow-bend” and“buckle”, interpreting their double meaning and their reference to Hopkins’s strong Christian belief.

Anonymous · Answer

Thank you very much for your help, I do appreciate it. I am also aware of my mistakes now, perhaps I'll manage to avoid them in my next essays.

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