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Nekosama Posted 9 years ago
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It has been said that the government should control the amount of violent content in films and on television so as to reduce the rate of crimes in society. Some people may reject it out of hand, but I think it worth further consideration for two reasons.

Firstly, children are always curious all things new, and they like imitating the others’ behaviors, but they don’t have ability like adults to tell the differences between right and wrong. Nowadays, almost every family has a television or computer which makes children more easily get access to violent contents. There are a number of studies indicating that children who are exposed to violent TV show or films are much more likely to be convicted of crime. A case of point is that three 8-year-old boys tied one of their classmates with a wood stake and burned him over hot fire which resulted in serve burn in large area of the poor boy’s body. These three boys were arrested of assault, and they admitted that they just imitated a well-known Chinese cartoon movie- Pleasant Goat and the Big, Big Wolf. Consequently, the cartoon movie was canceled under the pressure from the government after this accident. Besides, violent movies are also considered to be closely related to bullying according to a lot of authoritative research.

Secondly, too much media violence will make people become accustomed to the horror of violence and gradually take violence as a normal way to solve problems. People may think society justice cannot be realized in reasonable and fair ways which allow more and more children or young people post a potential danger to the security of society. For instance, a teenager girl was abused by some senior students. Although she told her teachers and parents about that, they did not take any action to deal with this problem. In order to protect herself, the girl "employed" several gangsters to kill those who abused her.

In conclusion, I think the government is supposed to establish strict laws to control or prohibit the violence on TV and movies.
  

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It has been said that the government should control restrict the amount of violent content in films and on television so as to reduce the rate of crimes in society. Some people may reject it this idea out of hand, but I think it is worth further conside ring ation for two reasons. Firstly, children are always curious about all things new, and they like imitating the oth er people's behavi or , but they don’t have the ability like adults to tell the differences between right and wrong.

  • It has been said that the government should control restrict the amount of violent content in films and on television so as to reduce the rate of crimes in society.
  • Some people may reject it this idea out of hand, but I think it is worth further conside ring ation for two reasons.
  • Firstly, children are always curious about all things new, and they like imitating the oth er people's behavi or , but they don’t have the ability like adults to tell the differences between right and wrong.
  • Nowadays, almost every family has a television or a computer which makes provides children more ea sy ily get access to violent conte nt.
  • There are A number of studies indica te ing that children who are exposed to violent TV sho ws or films are much more likely to be convicted of commit crime.
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It has been said that the government should control restrict the amount of violent content in films and on television so as to reduce the rate of crimes in society. Some people may reject it this idea out of hand, but I think it is worth further considering ation for two reasons.

Firstly, children are always curious

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