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Hello,

Would you please take a look at the following statement, and tell me whether it's correct?

Viewing vacations as timely rewards for valuing employees' work, without vacations, employees would lose their enthusiasm for work as the reward that a vacation would be is absent.

I know it may look kind of weird at first, but is it correct?

Thank you.

Clive · Accepted Answer

No, your first part doe not fit the rest of the sentence correctly.

Try to reword your text as two or more separate sentences.

CalifJim · Answer

SurferViewing vacations as timely rewards for valuing employees' work, without vacations, employees would lose their enthusiasm for work as the reward that a vacation would be is absent.

When you start with a participle clause (viewing vacations as ... work), it should contain the same subject implicitly as the subject of the main clause, but it doesn't in your sentence. The implicit subject of the participle clause is impersonal you or one or people (when [you/people] view vacations as ... work). The subject of the main clause is employees, so there is a discrepancy that needs to be fixed.

That first clause also has an error in logic. rewards for valuing employees' work means that those who value the work of the employees are receiving a reward. That's backwards. It's the employees who are receiving a reward.

The last part is unnecessarily repetitious and wordy. Just say would lose their enthusiasm for work without the reward of a vacation.

CJ

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